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quietlydying
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0 posted 2002-11-21 02:14 PM


'Cowardice', must stand pretending not
that myself be all which
lips give timeless life to.
Filter through these aimless days.
I’m lost in the midst
of this fire-engine red
dream.  [Pick it apart baby]
Dents and scratches, scuffed rubber
never really did belong with me.

Entwining such a pinkish nightmare.


/jen/


i'm so bitterly disappointed.  betty, i think it's time you leave now.

[This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-22-2002 02:27 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-11-21 03:54 PM


cool, although it will take me a couple more read through to decide what I think it means.

one bit: you used to twice.

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2 posted 2002-11-21 04:25 PM


This is great! glad to see you joined in the fun! I enjoyed your poem, very deep and very awsome.

Never be normal!

quietlydying
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3 posted 2002-11-22 02:27 AM


oh, you're right.  i didn't even notice.

but ::poof:: i changed it.  

can anyone guess where it was?  heh.

/jen/

i'm so bitterly disappointed.  betty, i think it's time you leave now.

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4 posted 2002-12-15 03:31 PM



Jen~
Well, look what I found back here.
Very cool write and an awesome answer to the challenge.
Gee...I could NEVER figure out where the other 'to' was. LOL
Nicely done, Jen.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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5 posted 2002-12-23 12:10 PM


Jen,
I see that yr challenge also
posits a challenge.

Like the swaggering of this.

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6 posted 2002-12-29 10:30 PM


"I’m lost in the midst
of this fire-engine red
dream."

Your Poetry coupled with Sigor Ros is a moment worth looking forward to. I liked this a lot Jen, you're brilliant you know that?

Are you scared?                                      BOO! Are you now?

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