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Sandpiper
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0 posted 2002-11-20 06:50 PM


AMONG THE NIGHT SIGHS

she stands,
shiver flesh
in short-versed windmoans
of the cold song

marble eyes open wide
swallowing weave-glow
of moon strands
through pine wire

winter hands
stroke the white fire
spooling into her hollow,
birthing need
on wetted thighs

“now I lay me…”
kindling
atop autumn’s crackle;
lipsmoothing creased blacksilk,
low limbs fashion
vine-clings for the slow dance

she stole the hush from crying
she stole the night from dying

and in her arms
gathered his chilling,
she held him close
among the night sighs;

humming the warm song
not quite sure of the words



"I am a sky where spirits live.
Stare into this deepening blue,
while the breeze says a secret."
Jelaluddin Rumi

[This message has been edited by Sandpiper (11-20-2002 06:52 PM).]

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2002-11-20 08:27 PM


I like this
and especially this verse
"and in her arms
gathered his chilling,
she held him close
among the night sighs;"

very nice
M

Robert Adamson
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2 posted 2002-11-20 08:41 PM


I liked every word and the way you put it. Thank you.

etoodog

Krystopher Morris
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3 posted 2002-11-20 09:45 PM


Thank You for Sharing your wonderful work!

Poetry is love and love is life.

Kristine
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Mahal Kita!!!
4 posted 2002-11-21 06:25 AM



Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2002-11-21 08:47 AM


very nicely written... strong imagery that adds to the overall effect of the words themselves as they flow down the page and into the reader..

good stuff

Sybil
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6 posted 2002-11-21 08:49 AM



Some beautiful imagery here...
thank you.

garysgirl
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7 posted 2002-11-21 09:19 AM


Sandpiper, you painted a picture with your
words here. Very nicely done, too. Thanks for
sharing your poetry with us. I enjoyed it.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Mistletoe Angel
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8 posted 2002-11-21 11:34 PM




(sigh) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I love it! (big hugggsssss) Such love always shines from your heart, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2002-12-14 04:28 AM


excellent!
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