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MARK V SHELDON
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0 posted 2002-11-19 06:34 PM


"TWENTY OR LESS...#88"

Copyright 2002 by:MARK V SHELDON


polyester Christmas

estranged from

silky hearts

found love

became sterile

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

© Copyright 2002 Mark V Sheldon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-11-19 06:42 PM


An interesting write... as usual...

I think perhaps I am feeling abit wordy myself these days, and the brevity you bring to us with these, is always a respite to my crowded head. Complex and layered with only a few words to show....

interesting to contrast the natural against the synthetic and then reference sterile. Perhaps we are all too fond of keeping our lives and thougths sterile as well and should once in a while go out and get our words gritty...so they might not find the 'love" they express to be only a stereotype of the actual..


MARK V SHELDON
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2 posted 2002-11-19 06:50 PM


Ron -- don't fret about "wordiness"...  I, for one, am very much enjoying your "narratives".  If you have things to say, by all means SAY THEM!  There's no law saying all must be brief, as you know...  I'm just experimenting with "limitations" to further expand my mind and outlooks as well as potentially those of others.  In terms of gritty words, tact/consideration aside, I say while we've still got "freedom of speech", USE IT!  Thanks for your thoughts, Ron.

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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3 posted 2002-11-19 07:03 PM


ah... I did not at all say what I meant to.. and yet said some of what I thought...
(chuckling)

I find the way a few words can be layered to mean so much fascinating and a break from my own need at the present time to "explain" everything...

as for being too concerned about it, no, I just find it to be more demanding of me to write a narrative or a longer piece than to be concise and boil it down to the essence. My efforts in this have been as yours to expand...

I always enjoy your works here... and the intellegence behind them

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4 posted 2002-11-19 07:20 PM


Mark~This is nothing less that brilliant!!
~Hugs~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing~

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5 posted 2002-11-19 09:24 PM






(smiles) Oh Mark, this is wonderful, sweet friend, you always explain so much in so few words, you are brilliant, every vision you make is more like a fully-painted canvas to us always, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Mark, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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