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RMW
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0 posted 2002-11-18 06:39 PM


A Sketch

The season extracts color
from the landscape,
leaving black and gray
to dominate the winter
of a northwest climate.
Veins stick out from oak and maple,
and from a distance, parks seem full
of large, round bruises. I don't know why
but I need sparse statement.

RMW

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Suetang
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1 posted 2002-11-18 07:25 PM


I really enjoyed the vision through your words and I'm surprised no one else found this treasure yet.

Take care.......Sue


I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

[This message has been edited by Suetang (11-18-2002 07:26 PM).]

garysgirl
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2 posted 2002-11-18 07:28 PM


Rmw, I really like the way you painted this picture with words. Thanks for sharing with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-11-18 07:40 PM


Slowly, color extracts itself
from the landscape,
============================

vivid image wrapped up in that line...
in this whole succinct piece of images.
you can have my share of winter.
well done poet sir.

No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ...
and I never saw blue like that before.

~Tom Kimmel~

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4 posted 2002-11-19 12:20 PM


and from a distance, parks seem full
of large, round bruises. I don't know why
but I need sparse statement.

~*~

Much to be said for sparse...
much

Midnitesun
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5 posted 2002-11-19 01:38 AM


When the leaves fall and the trees begin to bare themselves, sparsity is apropos.
passing shadows
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6 posted 2002-11-19 04:16 AM


beautiful write!
Cpat Hair
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7 posted 2002-11-19 08:18 AM


wonderful weaving of images and thought... enjoyed!
RMW
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8 posted 2002-11-19 09:42 AM


Thanks folks. This may be one of those where I will continue to prune until I'm left with nothing but "..sparse statement..". That's what goes with living in apple country. Smiling. Bob
Corinne
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9 posted 2002-11-20 03:03 PM


Interesting work here, Bob, especially the last line.

Very good.

Cor

passing shadows
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10 posted 2002-12-14 02:35 PM


maybe i'll visit apple country...you know I'm in orange country right now...

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Cpat Hair
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11 posted 2002-12-14 06:38 PM


perhaps sparse statements....are the distillaton of truths...

always enjoy... always.

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