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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-11-18 01:47 PM



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he
touched me
and I
went crashing
through
his skin
like electricity
redecorating me
causing
tattooed bumps
of chill
hair stood
on end
as moments
melted in
the shock


I’m not disappointed,  I never expected anything from you.

© Copyright 2002 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
majnu
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1 posted 2002-11-18 02:06 PM


and a near periodic format to go along. electrifying!

(sorry i couldn't pass that one up.)

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

[This message has been edited by majnu (11-18-2002 04:44 PM).]

garysgirl
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2 posted 2002-11-18 02:26 PM


Helen, I like it. It felt like a shock of electricity going through.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Bill Charles
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3 posted 2002-11-18 02:30 PM


helen - yes, it would be like that...

BC

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4 posted 2002-11-18 11:50 PM




(smiles) Oh Helen, I just love this, sweet friend, your beautiful words spark an electrical storm here, I love the lightning you cast with words, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Madame Chipmunk
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5 posted 2002-11-19 01:10 AM


Oh YES!!!!!!
I could feel that shock!!!
Beautifully expressed, Helen
~ shocked rodent hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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