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Drexler_McStyles
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Venice, Ca

0 posted 2002-11-18 11:52 AM



Behind tin shutters
and star lit curtains
melodies fill a vacancy
left by the moonlight
Behind closed doors
and parked cars
sweat is being brewed
candles are fluttering
nightgowns
are being laid to rest

Down south
girls giggle atop a swing set
about their chemical alterations
and my voyeuristic inclinations
while hobos howl at the moon
Down here
in the twilight of my youth
I mock the world
as it passes me by
I see old men cry
as beasts unearth
that which they have hidden

In the aftermath
some years later
long after now
we will wonder
aloud
to ourselves
how such a place
or time
was ever lost to us
and have
no reply
beyond the years


© Copyright 2002 Steven Doherty - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-11-18 11:55 AM




(sigh) Oh Drexler, this is marvelous, I just love how you describe each of the places in your words, and how the picture slowly fades to black like a gondola slowly slipping into the night of a canel! (big huggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Drexler, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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2 posted 2002-11-18 11:57 AM


hmmm...I was thinking Venice, La.

But then, of course I would.

This is excellent.

I'm enjoying your work very much.

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3 posted 2002-11-18 12:05 PM



And even before I read, I wondered,
Venice, California
where my feet once traipsed
and where the sun still shines
even on the dark side

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4 posted 2002-11-18 12:19 PM


Some things never really change, do they?
Enjoyed surfing Venice with you again.


"Down here
in the twilight of my youth
I mock the world
as it passes me by
I see old men cry
as beasts unearth
that which they have hidden"

Drexler_McStyles
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5 posted 2002-11-18 01:36 PM


Yeah Venice Beach, Ca. I forget we are a worlwide community here, though I didnt know there is a Venice, La. thanx for the commentary

D.

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6 posted 2002-11-18 04:45 PM


ahh.. you're a damn good poemer
Sandpiper
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7 posted 2002-11-18 08:32 PM


Yes, we will--excellent!!

"I am a sky where spirits live.
Stare into this deepening blue,
while the breeze says a secret."
Jelaluddin Rumi

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8 posted 2002-11-18 08:34 PM


Excellent....very well done!
~Hugs~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing~

Martie
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9 posted 2002-11-18 08:37 PM


Drexler

Enjoyed this so much, being a so cal girl..but also because it is excellent poetry.

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2002-11-19 03:05 AM


Enjoyed...James
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11 posted 2002-11-19 03:19 AM


I thought Venice Italy. Enjoyed this as I do your other work.
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