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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-11-16 01:54 AM



I thought that I would take a chance
and edit thought on sweet romance...
but it seems I've not the "stuff"--
I can't edit quite enough.

Forgive me Ed, forgive me Nance...
you smiled with me and took the chance.
But I wrote some lousy words--
at least I know two people heard!


[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-16-2002 05:14 AM).]

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2002-11-16 02:07 AM


Did he call your bluff?
wranx
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since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
2 posted 2002-11-16 02:54 AM


I'll Huff and Puff and raise your Bluff.

Who ya kiddin' witch?

T'is always enough!

Or, as I've told a Very Special Woman, It matters.


Ed

EagleScorpion
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since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever
3 posted 2002-11-17 11:10 PM


make that three!!
oh dont be so hard on yourself i share your predicament every day

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA
4 posted 2002-11-18 01:03 AM


Aww Man am I getting the edited version!?

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296
Michigan
5 posted 2002-11-18 01:24 AM


At the risk of being taken too seriously, I really believe that I have totally enjoyed everything of yours which I have ever read...
but maybe I've read them after you've edited them
~ hugs and grins

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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