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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2002-11-14 09:44 PM


Where is school? On top of the hill
where the private parochial paradise
sits still. Encased in a burnt red brick
sticking in a niche of curdled milk
and lukewarm tête-à-têtes a brain
shrinks through fiberglass cables
and juggles three thoughts minus
the sugary donuts that growl inside
the torrent of wind knocking loose
tooth after tooth -blamed on the leak
in the roof seen as a technological
faux pas, they study fox paws sleep an hour
and get red marks. This- what I wish I was.
-to be young again, peers down the hall.

To Kill a Mockingbird three grades early
N- N- N- 280 pages skipping the N-
Whispers are the only cold reminder in the
outhouse barracks where the yellow snowflakes
are never taken off the windows because the
heat costs an extra paycheck but the teacher
is enough to warm the cheeks except next week
280 pages are due. This- what I wish I was -
In the early prime of a budding career when
nameless upon nameless girls can carve boys
as well as their initials on their desktops and binders
reminders that someone is looking for you.
No nap no recess basketball and acting.
Juggle and dribble on top of the hill

Down the hill trickling
where the fiberglass ends
The new kid is struggling
to fit like a peg.

I’m writing their papers and doing their math,
thirty miles north in university Hell.

Sometimes
I wish
I’d listened to Daddy
who sits in a grave, still
Wishing he was-

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (11-15-2002 06:47 PM).]

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NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise
1 posted 2002-11-14 10:19 PM


Welcome back. People are missing you and wondering where you are hiding.

Good to see you posting your poems again.  Marti

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Louisa May Alcott



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2 posted 2002-11-15 08:05 AM


love this Walt.... been a while...nice to see you back and this offering... certainly one of my favorites from you
Kethry
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3 posted 2002-11-15 08:12 AM


This, this, this is wonderful but after reading it I feel my brain has shrunk through fibreglass cables.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Sunshine
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4 posted 2002-11-15 08:40 AM


WALT'S HOME!!!!!!!!!

about time.

I'll be back to take this all in full.
Would you QUIT hiding on us, please?


elisaseyes
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5 posted 2002-11-15 07:18 PM


Aahhhh Walt. You can make our busy, but boring lives seem so busy and intresting. Helping kids with projects, taking someone to acting at the theater or to ballet class or swim lessons. You make me appreciate what at first seems hum drum daily repetition. You throw personality traits in there so I can tell which stanza is which child. You remind me why I married a creative type!
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6 posted 2002-11-15 08:43 PM


Hi Walt!! This is an awesome write, enjoyed it. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Poet deVine
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7 posted 2002-11-16 09:24 PM


It's nice to read you here, my friend. I can see that you've been writing SO much lately...welcome home.
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8 posted 2002-11-16 09:31 PM


*******************************************
In the early prime of a budding career when
nameless upon nameless girls can carve boys
as well as their initials on their desktops and binders
reminders that someone is looking for you.

*******************************************
And we've been looking for you in here, glad to have you back for a visit.

wayoutwalt
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9 posted 2002-11-17 01:05 PM


thanks for the replies if i ever write anything else it will be here
JamesMichael
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10 posted 2002-11-18 05:30 PM


Enjoyed...James
cruz
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11 posted 2002-11-19 08:58 AM


i think this is magnifico! the style is most fantabuloso as big as an oso. well written. i like the rhyming and the pho paw things. get that paper for school done.
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12 posted 2002-11-19 09:56 AM


I am pleased to see you posting again.I want to thank you again for recommending Passions.Up until then I had only expirenced really screwed up poetry sites.I was begaining to think they were all alike.I enjoyed the stream of conscientious in this post.

paladin

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13 posted 2002-11-19 03:09 PM


Welcome back Waltyyy!
Have missed you...

great to read you again too.. this is excellent!

Maree

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14 posted 2002-11-19 03:16 PM


Well, Walt, it looks like you've been missed around here. After reading your work, I can certainly see why. You made this so interesting that I seemed to read it faster and faster, the farther down the page I got.
I hope that I'll see more of you here on Passions In Poetry. Thank you for sharing this with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-19-2002 03:17 PM).]

wayoutwalt
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15 posted 2002-11-19 07:44 PM


to you all
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