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D.Lester Young
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since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

0 posted 2002-11-13 09:33 PM


Pointed to head
Russian roulette
Imaginary bullets
To hell

But life is more
Than that
Searching voids
Of excruciating pain

Sick cylinders
Of giving up
Keep recycling
In clicking sounds

This gun does not
Shoot projectiles
But blanks
That penetrates feelings

Scars building up
To blood letting
Draining self esteem
Into cold steel

Gun of death
Chilling truth
Of no return
Frozen in time

The hand of fate
In your inner faith
That does not trigger
The total end

Thought: In my depression, a bullet will never end it. For when everything is lost, I can still find hope. I believe I am in a living hell, trying to find a little bit of heaven.

D.Lester Young 11/13/2002
Tuscaloosa, AL
Copyright © D.Lester Young (White Eagle poetry)

© Copyright 2002 David Lester Young - All Rights Reserved
regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
1 posted 2002-11-13 10:35 PM




This is very much different from the last several of your poems.

I hope if you are writing about yourself that you find peace.
  
With Warm Regards,
Pat  
  
  


..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (11-14-2002 01:00 AM).]

Radrook
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since 2002-08-09
Posts 648

2 posted 2002-12-11 07:43 PM


Beautiful!
Enjoyed the imagery.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
3 posted 2002-12-12 02:34 AM


depression sucks
garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
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4 posted 2002-12-12 02:39 AM


Very well-written, but sad.....  

Hope things are better, now..  

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

nicolecruz
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since 2002-12-11
Posts 16

5 posted 2002-12-12 07:06 PM


haunting...somehow you managed to leave me with a resounding sense of existential optimism. fascinating and well executed. i enjoyed it very much.
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