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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-11-13 02:34 AM


"I'll have scotch" I said as I
hugged the stool with my behind
hoping to find some comfort there.
"A double shot over ice--
and then just splash the soda--slow."


The drummer? He was late again.
Then the truck was packed all wrong.
Whoever did it, forgot egg crates..
tonight, I knew--there was no 'rise'...

Peppy would stand--I knew he would--
his ego hated the obscure
of amps and trees that sparked the light.
It would be that "hard day's night".

The bus broke down outside Leesville,
the guys tucked their hair beneath their hats.
I was singing "Born To Lose..."--
then Johnny told me to shut up.

He kissed me on my cheek
and grinned--my Johnny?
No--he could not sin.
But then he only played rhythm--
usually we turned him down--
claiming bad cords on a monitor..
until of course, he let harp sing.

Then Johnny never could be stopped.

Bryan he was Beautiful...
his hair was rainbows, just like mink.
Wavelets flowing his remorse,
I used to brush it from beneath
before he walked onstage.

Steve always hid behind a suit--
a hat and shades and he could play--
fulfilled--he let that lead guitar
tattoe
in spine
his inner cries
so deep within--
without--our minds.

Mother Bruce worked the sound board--
always bumming cigarettes.
A beauty of the Greek, he was,
but somehow always lacked the grace
asking every woman's favor, he
told me once he believed
in increased odds.

And there I was,
one of the guys
the lonely girl
that graced the crew.
I duct-taped line
across the stage--
I learned to roll
the cords up loose--
avoiding crimp of wire...

*     *     *

Denny's was, always strange--
cops in glare of uniform
as we stumbled in from bus--
once a waitress quit on the spot--
we sat at her station.

I didn't blame her one damn bit.
In fact, I should have
followed her.
They asked who had worked that night--
not one of us remembered...

Who had worked the door
or floor
and who had challenge of the stage--
who had tuned up which guitar...
Which city had put up with us...

*     *     *

I fell to sleep right at the bar--
I used my purse for pillow.
A customer sang "Lonely girl"
and I just smiled there in my bed.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-13-2002 06:06 AM).]

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regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
1 posted 2002-11-13 08:38 AM



Serenity...I like this for the fact you have painted a picture with words of a way of life I'd not have known;
causing me to feel I was there, observing this little slice of life.

Your talent as a writer is outstanding I always enjoy whatever you post,
not so much for content, but, for the creativity you use so well to express  it.

Thanking you for sharing your talent with us.

Warm regards,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-11-13 08:40 AM


The drummer? He was late again.
Then the truck was packed all wrong.
Whoever did it, forgot egg crates..
tonight, I knew--there was no 'rise'...

Peppy would stand--I knew he would--
his ego hated the obscure
of amps and trees that sparked the light.
It would be that "hard day's night".

=====================================

Bryan he was Beautiful...
his hair was rainbows, just like mink.
Wavelets flowing his remorse,
I used to brush it from beneath
before he walked onstage.

Steve always hid behind a suit--
a hat and shades and he could play--
fulfilled--he let that lead guitar
tattoe
in spine
his inner cries
so deep within--
without--our minds.

================================


I have said before (and will say again)
YOU ROCK...and it rolls me!!!
LOVE this....and the needy mothy me says...

WRITE A PROSE about all these memories !!!!
yeah....Im greedy with your words

No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ...
and I never saw blue like that before.

~Tom Kimmel~

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15
Posts 738
land of flora and fauna
3 posted 2002-11-13 08:47 AM


Enjoyed the ride!!
Cpat Hair
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Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-11-13 08:49 AM


Denny's was, always strange--
cops in glare of uniform
as we stumbled in from bus--
once a waitress quit on the spot--
we sat at her station.

I didn't blame her one damn bit.
In fact, I should have
followed her.
They asked who had worked that night--
not one of us remembered...

Who had worked the door
or floor
and who had challenge of the stage--
who had tuned up which guitar...
Which city had put up with us...
(chuckling).....


Nicely told Witch... see you found some food for thought... shoot any pool?


serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-11-13 10:40 AM


grinning...

I almost titled this "yesterday's beer tastes bad when you burp"

OW

and Ron? It's all your fault...I scratched twice on the eight...



OW



Thanks...gawd I wish sleep was as easy as it seemed last night when that jerk in the Grateful Dead t shirt kept talking to me....

Thanks all--for strolling with me a bit.

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2002-11-13 11:10 AM


Rich and wonderful! I agree with Janet Marie, write this up as a story!!
Connel
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since 2002-11-04
Posts 736
Florida, USA
7 posted 2002-11-13 11:15 AM


Beautiful poem.. Thank you so much for sharing.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

Ceinwyn
Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA
8 posted 2002-11-13 12:17 PM


*does her Oliver Twist impersonation* Can I have some more please or something to that affect lol..leaves me thirsty & hungry for more...!

Kristen

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296
Michigan
9 posted 2002-11-13 12:24 PM


Wonderful writing, Karen...
It takes lots of talent to write a story and bring it real so poetically
~ rockin chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

10 posted 2002-11-14 12:16 PM


trust me...this is just a spit shine on the boots of yesterday...

so much more to say, but I thank you all, so kindly.

ever generous--you good poet people!

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