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Midnitesun
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0 posted 2002-11-12 11:24 AM




You can curdle fresh milk
with a sideways glance,
or fire up frozen thoughts,
make a lame gal dance.
You leave me staring into blue space
in a midnite trance.
You are the nightengale's song
and the lonely loon's wail.
You are poetry,
sometimes pure,
sometimes simple,
but never stale.
If I could I would
attempt to possess you.
But you are free
to verse me,
and that's why
I still breathe you in
a trance.



© Copyright 2002 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
MARK V SHELDON
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1 posted 2002-11-12 11:47 AM


Transcending limitations
and descriptions
with honor...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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2 posted 2002-11-12 12:20 PM


You can curdle fresh milk
with a sideways glance,


LOVE THAT LINE!!! talk about an opening catch phrase... wow


or fire up frozen thoughts,
make a lame gal dance.
You leave me staring into blue space
in a midnite trance.

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If I could I would
attempt to possess you.
But you are free
to verse me,
and that's why
I still breathe you in
a trance.

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VERY COOL RHYMES...
Kacy this is a delightful diddy here...
wonderful word play and phrasing.
was a treat to read aloud.
waaay cool & groovy too

No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ...
and I never saw blue like that before.

~Tom Kimmel~

NewEnglandlazurlu
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3 posted 2002-11-12 03:56 PM


I love this. Wonderful writing. . .

huggles, Marti

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Louisa May Alcott



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4 posted 2002-11-12 03:58 PM


That was a lovely ad descriptive poem.

"Sticks and stones will break my bones,
But words will break my heart"

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2002-11-12 04:05 PM


Superb!
ThisDiamond

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6 posted 2002-11-12 06:26 PM


This is beautiful.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2002-11-12 07:15 PM


Kacy!  This is wonderful writing!!
I love this...and I'm keeping it!
~Hugs~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing~

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8 posted 2002-11-12 07:19 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, sometimes it is just so meaningful to feel it all in a trance and tread softly on it, for it feels so beautiful! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kacy, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

jwesley
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9 posted 2002-11-12 10:47 PM


K o o L my fiend...

jwesley

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10 posted 2002-11-13 12:42 PM


What lovely writing!!! unique indeed
Madame Chipmunk
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11 posted 2002-11-13 12:46 PM


Great writing, Kacy... especially the line about curdling the milk...
~ hugs from a curdled chipmunk

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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12 posted 2002-11-13 12:50 PM


Enjoyed the read. cheers
Larry C
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13 posted 2002-11-13 01:19 AM


Kacy!
=============
But you are free
to verse me,
and that's why
I still breathe you in
a trance.
=============
How do you do that? You make that sound pretty...well, hot.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Midnitesun
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14 posted 2002-11-13 09:35 AM


Smiling here, in a trance.  My transient muse gifted me this one. Thank you, everyone, for your time and kind replies.
I enjoyed this one myself

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