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The Thaw of Discontent

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Kit McCallum
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0 posted 11-12-2002 07:43 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kit McCallum

The Thaw of Discontent


Buried 'neath the frozen tundra,
Lies a heart that's weak and cold;
Sheltered in it's frigid wasteland,
Locked within an icy mold.

Long-abandoned, frail and weary,
Hidden there, beneath the snow;
Crouched within it's winter cover,
Silently, it waits below.

Pitiful in it's dementia,
Left to perish at it's will;
Time has passed, and still it lingers,
Fending off the piercing chill.

Crystals form around it's casement,
Threatening to invade the core;
Yet, the heat of bitter mem'ries,
Staves the final outcome more.

Timidly, it's life-force flickers,
Beating back the frosty grave;
Grinding out an S.O.S.
That echoes through it's frozen cave.

Lost in limbo, there it hovers,
Not alive and yet, not dead;
Trod upon by those it trusted,
High above it's tomb of dread.

Still it waits with patient longing,
For the thaw of discontent;
Ever pining, wishing, hoping,
That it's anguish will relent.


/Kit McCallum

© Copyright 2002 Kit McCallum - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 11-12-2002 08:04 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

I like this
Something I can identify with and understand
Good write

Gloom
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2 posted 11-12-2002 08:09 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Kit,
Excellent write.
Janet Marie
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Pitiful in it's dementia,
Left to perish at it's will;
Time has passed, and still it lingers,
Fending off the piercing chill.

Crystals form around it's casement,
Threatening to invade the core;
Yet, the heat of bitter mem'ries,
Staves the final outcome more.

Timidly, it's life-force flickers,
Beating back the frosty grave;

Grinding out an S.O.S.
That echoes through it's frozen cave.

Lost in limbo, there it hovers,
Not alive and yet, not dead;
===========================

Still it waits with patient longing,
For the thaw of discontent;

============================

Well, lookie who I found..me gator girl!! \
my goodness Kit-girlie...me thinks ya been in Canada too long...we need to meet at the beach

Ya know...if one looks at this melancholy masterpiece..they can find the warm just below the icy blue....the hope hidden in the rhymes...
Winter has set in...but springs around the corner.
As always you work your theme and metaphors to poetic perfection in your gift of cadence.
Always a treat to find your name here groovy girl.
Now grab your sunblock and lets go find some burn. ( Im a moth...what do ya expect)

No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ...
and I never saw blue like that before.

~Tom Kimmel~

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4 posted 11-12-2002 09:11 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


"Grinding out an SOS..."

dang, girl!

Serve up some more!
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5 posted 11-12-2002 09:42 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

You are such an awesome writer! I truly mean it! You really had me going there for awhile with this one! I was taking it literally at first, then realized you were speaking metaphorically--and brilliantly, may I add!

Earth Angel
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6 posted 11-12-2002 09:50 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I can't help but smile when I see your name next to a poem... for I know I have a treat waiting... packaged in perfect rhyme and rhythm and decorated with the finest of metaphors... and always, just what I want. *S*

This reads so perfectly it gave me chills. *S*
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7 posted 11-12-2002 10:02 AM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Very beautifully said Kit.  An inspiration
you are...  let that feeling go it's own
path,  to be replaced by contentment and
the feeling of being where one should be..
MARK V SHELDON
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8 posted 11-12-2002 10:13 AM       View Profile for MARK V SHELDON   Email MARK V SHELDON   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit MARK V SHELDON's Home Page   View IP for MARK V SHELDON

Ah, there you are...  I've missed reading your work, and this poem reafirms why...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

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Keeping the fires burning here - So you can just keep on writing, my friend - This is awesome...
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Kit

You are a very talented writer and a lovely person.  I'm so happy to know you and be able to read gems like this.  
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This is an amazing poem. I thought, she doesn't know me, how could she capture me so well?  True, I feel that way with many poems, but, this one hits home, like no other! I love it!
I believe this might be one of the first poems of yours I've read, and like the others here, must say, what a treat. Such talent, thank you for sharing it with us.

With warm regards,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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(big hugggsssssss) Oh Kit, this is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, I cried reading this as I think so many can relate to this feeling and my heart goes out to all who have been tread upon and wish for true love and joy to embrace them! (sigh) You truly are an angel to us all, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kit, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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WOW!!  Don't make us wait so long between posts Kit!
I know you're busy...this is fantastic!
~Hugs~

~Let your heart guide you...
  It whispers so listen closely~

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Powerful images...may the warmth of love unthaw that heart..

...believe what your heart feels...

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Kit, I have read this several times today... you certainly picked a great title and followed it up with a beautiful poem.

*s
M
Kit McCallum
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Boy, you beautiful poet people sure know how to make someone's day. It's been so long since my last post, I'd almost forgotten how wonderful the feeling is to hear such positive feedback and encouragement.  My life has been far too busy on this end, with work and family distractions, but it sure felt good to make this post. Thank you everyone, for brightening up my day.



Professor Gloom   I'm glad you enjoyed Professor Gloom, thanks for letting me know you were able to relate to this piece, much appreciated.

Seymour Tabin:  Hello Sy … thank your for the smilies, and for the kind words. Hugs to you.

Janet Marie:  LOL … you found me!  You're right JM, I've been in Canada too long. If we could meet at the beach, I would be absolutely thrilled. Thanks for bringing a smile this way, this morning gator gal … you know I love ya.

Sunshine:  LOL … I would love to "serve up some more" Karilea … and you know I'm trying, trying, trying. Thanks for helping me with the DM admin sunshiney friend … it seems to have helped to let this muse loose for a bit. Hugs …

Earth Angel:  Thank you so much for such an encouraging comment Earth Angel. That was lovely to hear … many thanks to you.

Southern:  And I can't help but smile when I see your name on a comment Southern … it's always a delight to hear your thoughts, and I truly appreciate it. Thank you.

Magnus:  I think you've summed this up beautifully Magnus. Thank you for reading into the content and letting me know how it came across. Many thanks.

MARK V SHELDON:  Awww, thank you Mark!  I have been here in the background helping with moderation and admin duties, but I'm afraid I've been far too absent from writing poetry. I'm hoping it won't be quite so long until the next post. Thank you for the kind words.

Nan:  Thank you for understanding Nan, and for helping to give me a little time from the pressures as well. Funny how the muse comes out to play only when she feels like it, lol. Hugs.

Martie:  What a lovely and encouraging comment Martie. I very much appreciate you as a writer and friend as well, and I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed this piece.

regards2you: It's wonderful to hear that you could relate to this piece Pat.  It's been a while since I've posted, so I'm not surprised that it might be the first you've read from me. I hope to be able to find the time to post more frequently again. Thank you for the lovely comment.

Mistletoe Angel:  Ah Noah … there you go again, making me smile. You are so very much appreciated, my young friend. Thanks you for your warmth, encouragement and friendship. You are a treasure.

Enchantress:  I'll try not to take so long between posts Enchantress, but I appreciate you understanding. I'm glad to know you enjoyed this one. Many hugs to you.

Scorpio:  Your comment is a beautiful phrase in and of itself Scorpio … thank you very much for the kind words, I'm very grateful.

Nakdthoughts:  Thank you for letting me know you liked the title and content Maureen. Funny, but this poem started with the first line milling around in my head. I had no idea where it was going until it was over, lol. Many thanks for your comments.

With much appreciation to all,  
/Kit
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I've known this feeling well, but there's no way I could have expressed it with such wonderful imagery.  

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

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some nice lines

"I can write better than anybody who can write faster, and I can write faster than anybody who can write better."
- A. J. Liebling (1904-1963)

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We can only hope so...James
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Enjoyed.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

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Its wonderful to read your work again, Kit...
I love your little smilies, but your poetry is the real treat
~ loving chipmunk hugs

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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Kit, you even write melancholy with a touch of grace.  I know these emotions well, but am in awe of how well you present them.  It's a keeper~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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Every poem I read of yours confirms more the fact that you are a master of the written word. Your cadence is flawless and your theme timeless. Things defrost quickly in Florida
Bridget Shenachie
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24 posted 11-13-2002 11:38 PM       View Profile for Bridget Shenachie   Email Bridget Shenachie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bridget Shenachie

Kit--
Wish that I had written this.  You expressed the experience so well.



Shenachie
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