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The Thaw of Discontent
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The Thaw of Discontent |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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The Thaw of Discontent Buried 'neath the frozen tundra, Lies a heart that's weak and cold; Sheltered in it's frigid wasteland, Locked within an icy mold. Long-abandoned, frail and weary, Hidden there, beneath the snow; Crouched within it's winter cover, Silently, it waits below. Pitiful in it's dementia, Left to perish at it's will; Time has passed, and still it lingers, Fending off the piercing chill. Crystals form around it's casement, Threatening to invade the core; Yet, the heat of bitter mem'ries, Staves the final outcome more. Timidly, it's life-force flickers, Beating back the frosty grave; Grinding out an S.O.S. That echoes through it's frozen cave. Lost in limbo, there it hovers, Not alive and yet, not dead; Trod upon by those it trusted, High above it's tomb of dread. Still it waits with patient longing, For the thaw of discontent; Ever pining, wishing, hoping, That it's anguish will relent. /Kit McCallum |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I like this Something I can identify with and understand Good write Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit,    Excellent write. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Pitiful in it's dementia, Left to perish at it's will; Time has passed, and still it lingers, Fending off the piercing chill. Crystals form around it's casement, Threatening to invade the core; Yet, the heat of bitter mem'ries, Staves the final outcome more. Timidly, it's life-force flickers, Beating back the frosty grave; Grinding out an S.O.S. That echoes through it's frozen cave. Lost in limbo, there it hovers, Not alive and yet, not dead; =========================== Still it waits with patient longing, For the thaw of discontent; ============================ Well, lookie who I found..me gator girl!!  \my goodness Kit-girlie...me thinks ya been in Canada too long...we need to meet at the beach Ya know...if one looks at this melancholy masterpiece..they can find the warm just below the icy blue....the hope hidden in the rhymes... Winter has set in...but springs around the corner. As always you work your theme and metaphors to poetic perfection in your gift of cadence. Always a treat to find your name here groovy girl. Now grab your sunblock and lets go find some burn. ( Im a moth...what do ya expect) No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
"Grinding out an SOS..." dang, girl! Serve up some more! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You are such an awesome writer! I truly mean it! You really had me going there for awhile with this one! I was taking it literally at first, then realized you were speaking metaphorically--and brilliantly, may I add! Earth Angel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I can't help but smile when I see your name next to a poem... for I know I have a treat waiting... packaged in perfect rhyme and rhythm and decorated with the finest of metaphors... and always, just what I want. *S* This reads so perfectly it gave me chills. *S* |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Very beautifully said Kit. An inspiration you are... let that feeling go it's own path, to be replaced by contentment and the feeling of being where one should be.. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ah, there you are... I've missed reading your work, and this poem reafirms why... -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Keeping the fires burning here - So you can just keep on writing, my friend - This is awesome...  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Kit You are a very talented writer and a lovely person. I'm so happy to know you and be able to read gems like this. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is an amazing poem. I thought, she doesn't know me, how could she capture me so well? True, I feel that way with many poems, but, this one hits home, like no other! I love it! I believe this might be one of the first poems of yours I've read, and like the others here, must say, what a treat. Such talent, thank you for sharing it with us. With warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Kit, this is so very heartfelt, sweet friend, I cried reading this as I think so many can relate to this feeling and my heart goes out to all who have been tread upon and wish for true love and joy to embrace them! (sigh) You truly are an angel to us all, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kit, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! Don't make us wait so long between posts Kit! I know you're busy...this is fantastic! ~Hugs~ ~Let your heart guide you... |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Powerful images...may the warmth of love unthaw that heart.. ...believe what your heart feels... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Kit, I have read this several times today... you certainly picked a great title and followed it up with a beautiful poem. *s M |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Boy, you beautiful poet people sure know how to make someone's day. It's been so long since my last post, I'd almost forgotten how wonderful the feeling is to hear such positive feedback and encouragement. My life has been far too busy on this end, with work and family distractions, but it sure felt good to make this post. Thank you everyone, for brightening up my day.  Professor Gloom I'm glad you enjoyed Professor Gloom, thanks for letting me know you were able to relate to this piece, much appreciated. Seymour Tabin: Hello Sy … thank your for the smilies, and for the kind words. Hugs to you. Janet Marie: LOL … you found me! You're right JM, I've been in Canada too long. If we could meet at the beach, I would be absolutely thrilled. Thanks for bringing a smile this way, this morning gator gal … you know I love ya. Sunshine: LOL … I would love to "serve up some more" Karilea … and you know I'm trying, trying, trying. Thanks for helping me with the DM admin sunshiney friend … it seems to have helped to let this muse loose for a bit. Hugs … Earth Angel: Thank you so much for such an encouraging comment Earth Angel. That was lovely to hear … many thanks to you. Southern: And I can't help but smile when I see your name on a comment Southern … it's always a delight to hear your thoughts, and I truly appreciate it. Thank you. Magnus: I think you've summed this up beautifully Magnus. Thank you for reading into the content and letting me know how it came across. Many thanks. MARK V SHELDON: Awww, thank you Mark! I have been here in the background helping with moderation and admin duties, but I'm afraid I've been far too absent from writing poetry. I'm hoping it won't be quite so long until the next post. Thank you for the kind words. Nan: Thank you for understanding Nan, and for helping to give me a little time from the pressures as well. Funny how the muse comes out to play only when she feels like it, lol. Hugs. Martie: What a lovely and encouraging comment Martie. I very much appreciate you as a writer and friend as well, and I'm so glad to hear you enjoyed this piece. regards2you: It's wonderful to hear that you could relate to this piece Pat. It's been a while since I've posted, so I'm not surprised that it might be the first you've read from me. I hope to be able to find the time to post more frequently again. Thank you for the lovely comment. Mistletoe Angel: Ah Noah … there you go again, making me smile. You are so very much appreciated, my young friend. Thanks you for your warmth, encouragement and friendship. You are a treasure. Enchantress: I'll try not to take so long between posts Enchantress, but I appreciate you understanding. I'm glad to know you enjoyed this one. Many hugs to you. Scorpio: Your comment is a beautiful phrase in and of itself Scorpio … thank you very much for the kind words, I'm very grateful. Nakdthoughts: Thank you for letting me know you liked the title and content Maureen. Funny, but this poem started with the first line milling around in my head. I had no idea where it was going until it was over, lol. Many thanks for your comments. With much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I've known this feeling well, but there's no way I could have expressed it with such wonderful imagery. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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poemchick New Member
since 2002-11-13
Posts 4 |
some nice lines "I can write better than anybody who can write faster, and I can write faster than anybody who can write better." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
We can only hope so...James |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Enjoyed. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Its wonderful to read your work again, Kit... I love your little smilies, but your poetry is the real treat  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Kit, you even write melancholy with a touch of grace. I know these emotions well, but am in awe of how well you present them. It's a keeper~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Every poem I read of yours confirms more the fact that you are a master of the written word. Your cadence is flawless and your theme timeless. Things defrost quickly in Florida |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Kit-- Wish that I had written this. You expressed the experience so well.  Shenachie |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Auguste: Thank you so much for the lovely comment Michael, I'm very grateful. Poemchick: I'm glad you enjoyed the lines poemchick, thanks for letting me know. JamesMichael: We can only hope spring is just around the corner … thank you James. Connel: Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed Connel, I very much appreciate it. Madame Chipmunk: What a lovely thing to hear Lyra … thank you for giving me a smile this morning. I enjoy creating those little smilies too, but there is a much greater sense of satisfaction when a poem is completed. Thank you for such sweet words. Honeybee: Thank you so much for this beautiful comment Melissa … I truly appreciate your kind words, many thanks. Balladeer: The warmth within your comments, would thaw out this old heart any day, sweet poet. Thank you for always bringing such encouragement into my life. Hugs to you. Bridget Shenachie: Thank you so much for the kind words Bridget, what a lovely comment to hear, I'm very grateful. With much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Dear Kit-- Just a note to let you know that this poem impressed me so much that I took it to our writing group to share it with the other members. I did this without asking your permission and I hope that you are not offended. I've never seen a better description of getting through the dark times of life and this poem holds out such hope. Thank you for the inspiration. My writing group, The Prairie Inkwells, agreed that this was a truly awesome poem. Shenachie |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
The bitter struggle between love and apathy. Love will find you soon, if not already. Words like these reveal a soul full of warmth that the tiniest flicker may yet enflame and your anguish abated. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah, the poem has been refreshed... look wide, our Kit... with bright eyes... your muse awaits... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Kit~ A refreshing poem that gives HOPE to all that are in need.Enjoyed very much...Paul |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Kit wonderful writing once again, nice to see one of your postings here, always enjoy your work and thoughts. I look forward to more from you. Sincerely Rick |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Kit, somehow this slipped by me when you posted it. I am thankful someone found it and I was able to read and re-read it several times. I just adore your poems and get so much out of reading them. You are a brilliant writer and with oh so much talent. I want to say I wish you would post more, but then, I never want anyone here to take your writing for granted. Thank you again for the privilege of reading your works. Hugs, Marti |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Here's to a recession of the heartless glacier. Enjoyed |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Kit, Dear girl you always speak right to my tender broken heart. And with such insight, class and perfect finesse. And on top of all that such a great friend. Life is good when you're in the picture...do it again. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Kit, I am so happy that your muse is on the loose and that you have enthralled us with yet another So I really don't know what to say, but I would ask of you, Might I keep this? Extraordinary write Poetess Kit!! "When we're torn apart, shattered and scarred, love has the grace to save us" Saints and Angels as sung by Sarah Evans [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-19-2002 08:42 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kit, I haven't been here but about two months now, so I haven't read your poetry before either. I can tell that you have a lot of friends here and I can certainly see why. There is so much emotion and feeling in your poem. It is absolutely awesome. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I liked Richard's response, and I say, "here here!" A thaw is a good thing |
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