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Walter Poe
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0 posted 2002-11-12 03:41 AM


Hi, I say to the mirror
Who are you? Do i know you?
For what looks out is not me
He has no scars where his heart was
He has no marks from a million tears
He doesnt look as sad as i am
I cannot see her mark upon him

i cannot see each burning brand where she kissed him
i cannot see the aching ear she lied in  
he cannot hold the pain she has inflicted
One so large she couldnt have restricted
But it must be me looking back in the mirror
his eyes are as dead as mine
thats her real gift, killing whats inside

Take a good look at my face
Well, don't my smile look out of  place
look a little closer its easy to trace
The tracks of my tears

[This message has been edited by Walter Poe (11-12-2002 05:32 AM).]

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garysgirl
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1 posted 2002-11-12 03:51 AM


Yeah, Paul.....
most times people can't see what's going on inside of us....unless they look into our eyes.

Most can't hide their feelings if someone can read other's eyes...Gary and I do that a lot. We gaze deep into each other's eyes, right down into our inner beings.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2002-11-12 03:53 AM


my god/dess...

I think we should all sleep until the planets move tonight...

egads...this slices where it aches.


whew.

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-11-12 08:23 AM


i cannot see each burning brand where she kissed him
i cannot see the aching ear she lied in  
he cannot hold the pain she has inflicted
One so large she couldnt have restricted
But it must be me looking back in the mirror
his eyes are as dead as mine
thats her real gift, killing whats inside
================================

Well this just aches off the page....
some things hurt too much even for the rhyme.
touching emotional write Paul...

passing shadows
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4 posted 2002-12-12 02:40 AM


wow, this hurts me...remembering
Cpat Hair
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5 posted 2002-12-12 09:05 AM


yeah some real hurt in this one... too real...

I need to go find something light to read now... it simple stirs too many memories..

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-12-12 09:11 AM


Walter  
Ya know the mirror always gives a revese image. Something to think about. Enjoyed.

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2002-12-12 09:31 AM


Well, shame on her for breaking such a poetic heart!

~ sending some mending hugs!

Earth Angel

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