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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2002-11-11 10:19 PM

synchronized
titter-tattle
raindrops prattle
on tin roof
hammering
a pattern's spell--
heaven is
now raining hell--
within I'm safe
and warm--aloof.

Patterns
even in the rain...
watch it stop
and start again.
I look at light
beneath monsoon,
and swear there is
a watered moon.

A satellite has gravity,
just different from
what's supposed to be...
not free to bound
the plains of mars,
but shackled in a cavity.

Tell me that my rhyme is wrong.
Parse my syntax,
critique the song...

But poetry is my release.
I do know why
the caged bird sings...

* * *

With a tip of the hat to Ms. Angelou:
http://www.oreenscott.com/mayaangelou.htm

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-11-2002 10:24 PM).]

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

1 posted 2002-11-11 10:46 PM

never would I
critique
the song
of a caged
wren

how a little bird
can fill
a world

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2002-11-11 11:03 PM

Karen, there are a plethora of talented poets here, but, very few write with the pinache, clever expression and intensity as you do. Although uninentional

I often relate and find pieces of myself in your words and you always take me back to memories and emotions that still move or haunt me.
It's hard to say how I relate to this because it just blows me away, but, just know that I do relate, hopefully that's enough~

Yes, I'm keeping this~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-12-01 08:37 AM

Y'know...you only read the best...
I'm so glad we have back pages to rest in...
I love uncovering treasures...

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2002-12-01 08:44 AM

Serenity,
Pinache, that's the word, excellent write.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2002-12-01 09:37 AM

Serenity, another one of your lil gems to tuck away. Well done Karen!

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

6 posted 2002-12-01 09:37 AM

Serenity Blaze

~*~

You have chutzpah
You have balls
Your rain of word's like
Niagara Falls

You speak the truth
You speak your mind
Your poetic works
Are quite a find

You are unique
You've found your niche
Rein not your words
On edit's leash

You spill your guts
You share your thoughts
Your poetic works
Are respected lots

Sometimes you write
With rhyme and reason
Then off you go
'Tis hunting season

You hold my interest
With your sage mots
You make me laugh
With your derry o's

Be they simple
And in-your-face
Be they ranting
Or full of grace

Your poems delight
And make one think
You fill the gaps
You're the missing link!

~*~

Earth Angel

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (12-01-2002 10:21 AM).]

sigheyes
Member

since 2001-04-25

Posts 323
the winds of destiny

7 posted 2002-12-01 09:38 AM

                    But poetry is my release.
                    I do know why
                    the caged bird sings...

Perfect!  LOVE THIS.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2002-12-01 10:16 AM

mybri....

lucky for this little bird that someone taught her to love jazz...tweety tweet woo beep a loo blop bam...(scat chirping yanno)

(psssst.

it's okay, nobody saw that)DIDJA FOLKS?

Melissa...I am humbled by such grand praise, and the only thing that bothers me about your work is that you don't post often enough lady! Hugs you.

Sunshine...warm smiles and hugs. Y'did it again. I'd forgotten about this one. Chuckle, sometimes I think I should add myself to my own library! snort. How do you find time to keep track of EVERYBODY? pssst...thank you

sy...yer precious to us all--I hope yanno that. and pinache? hmmm...think I should see a doctor about that? *wink* Thank you.

Donna, your name suits you so well. I should have called myself "Trouble" or "Hell on Wheels" or in this case? "Late for Supper"!
Thanks for reading lovely lady!

EA...grinning from ear to ear...I've got balls? EGADS! I knew the hormones were off the chart but that's ridiculous..if I'm growing those there is something else missing besides a link

and I'll e mail ya the rest of that rant!
Hugs you, with my gratitude. You made my day.

sigheyes, it's nice to carry around a vacation spot in your mind, isn't it? I knew you all would understand.

Gawd, I LOVE THIS PLACE!!!

sigh...thanks again.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2002-12-01 06:43 PM

enjoy your read

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

10 posted 2002-12-01 06:54 PM

(smiles) And I don't dare critique this either, as poetry is all about singing like the canary, or the nightingale, or even the vulture, not about some silly anapestic tentameter or anything in that matter! (big hugggssssss) You are a marvelous epitome of creativity, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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