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Radrook
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0 posted 2002-11-11 12:40 PM


The sentinels are guarding all the gates
and all the crocodiles are in their moats.
I clearly told that sentry
he should wait until I had secured
my herd of goats.

But simpleton as
he has always been,
instead
he sounded the defense alarm.
And when I catch him I will break his chin
and crush his hard-boiled head with my fat arm.

I'm not a violent man.
Don't get me wrong!
I am considered comely
and genteel.

But I assure you
that's the final gong
that birdbrain will set again to peal.

And there he goes upon the balustrade.
With a smiling face and soaking up the shade!

[This message has been edited by Radrook (11-11-2002 12:43 AM).]

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1 posted 2002-11-11 12:46 PM


I love to read your poetry Radrook, especially since I have to look things up and then think about it more deeply, keeps me on my toes! lol.   This, is excellent, as usual.
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2 posted 2002-11-11 12:48 PM


Radrook, I like this. You wrote it quite vividly. I could almost see the goats running wildly.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

Radrook
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3 posted 2002-11-11 01:11 AM


Thank you both for the feedback.
Glad you enjoyed.
God bless!

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4 posted 2002-11-11 03:51 PM




(sigh) Wow!!! Oh my gosh, this is poignant, you really had to make me cover my ears reading this with the might of your swing on the brass! (big hugggsssss) This is powerful, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Radrook, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Radrook
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5 posted 2002-11-12 12:50 PM


Thanks for the accolades!
I wrote it as a humorous piece.
I guess my sense of humor is rather idiosyncratic since no one yet has even as much as giggled. LOL

Thanks for feedback.
God bless!

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