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Allusions.................Illusions?
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Allusions.................Illusions? |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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"An Irishman is never drunk as long as he can hold on to one blade of grass and not fall off the earth" - Irish saying . . . Through the vale of tears I've finally accepted, hiding in plain sight even enjoying the white noise of crowds in passing, amid the alien corn on the first day of an Indian Summer, the moonlight I thought gone found my shadow. Young eyes as intense as mine ensnared me. Electra why'd you recognize my lonliness and decide to do something about it? John Wesley Hardin gunslinger undoer of 40 lives vowed vengence on vigilantes when grass was found in the toes of his hung brother proving a tortured death at the end of a rope purposely cut too long. I froze physically in your light. Internally I felt I'd been caught, a little boy at the end of a favorite uncle's chase, adolescent girl peeking through the blanket to watch/not watch the scary part of the movie. I'd been trying to clutch a single blade of grass and leave this earth. I was 26 years, 6 weeks the day you were born. You say you want to see me. What are you thinking? What's to become of me? we'll see, we'll see. [This message has been edited by RSWells (11-09-2002 01:22 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'll be back... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
So many things going on in here, some I think understand, some I am guessing at. But your ending strikes like lightning, as reflected in a dusty mirror. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (11-09-2002 11:25 AM).] |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Richard, I love all your work, but I do believe I like this one best of all. I can read some things between the lines, but others I'm pondering in my mind, too. I really like the Irish saying, too...but that could be because I am about half Irish and I understand it. Thanks for sharing this wonderful work with us, Richard. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells Excellent title, enjoyed. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Yesterday was sunny and warm. Lured out for the day I ended up in a tavern. Across from me was a very pretty lass. I smiled, she smiled and said I looked lonely. This led to a conversation in which I, as is my habit, told her of some of my misfortunes. While one would not find this a way to win friends and influence people I figure if someone hangs around past my past then it can only get better from there. She came up with the saying which starts this poem minus the Irish drunk part, as a sort of laud towards my standing up to my woes. I wanted to give proper place to the quote and it turned out to be this saying (My mother's an O'Leary). The girl is less than half my age and seemed quite smitten by me who has about given up on love. She says she wants to see me again. I'm not exactly in a trusting mood but will call her (I did last night, it really is her number). The allusions are "vale of tears", "white noise", "amid the alien corn" and Electra (freudian for a daughter's fixation on her father). The illusion may be this whole notion of hers (and slowly mine). The Hardin tale I saw on a documentary this morning and seemed to fit in to this write. |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
wow that's all I have to say!!!!!!!!!! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well...it is a good write for sure, but somehow its contents seem troublesome. Reminds me of Lolita somehow, best rub your eyes   In the 60's people did drugs to make the world weird. Now the world is weird and they take Prozac to make it better. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (11-09-2002 04:11 PM).] |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Thanks for your notice folks......Ah Sharon, bless you always worrying about me. Sure this will end badly (if it even starts) but think of the fuel for future writes. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh Richard, this is excellent, sweet friend, this is a wonderful perspective on this common saying, I too love to use sayings and analyze them as we can learn from so many! (sigh) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent expression, Richard! And I finally read between the lines and got something right as your explanation confirmed! Sometimes I amaze myself!  Again, great piece of writing! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"but think of the fuel for future writes." |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
And you do write pretty darn good fueled with passion or anger Okay - won't worry but instead wait for all these poems. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow! Could be some great poetry come from this chance meeting. Much enjoyed. ~Hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Richard, your writing always expands my perimeters... -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Brings new meaning to reading "between the lines"!!! You never know till you try! |
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