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Sunday Service (a duet by wranx and serenity)
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Sunday Service (a duet by wranx and serenity) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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All the "good folks" were at Sunday service We chose to go fishing with a basket of Emmas' homemade loaves and a cheap bottle of "red" I lay back among the lazy Lilies admiring the stained glass reflections We heard the bass tones rumbling before we felt the need We saw the cork a quiverin shivering within our need Yea..we heard the timbre's tumble rumbling our needs be known yea we saw the curtains tumble down the esplanade... The psalms of elation Echoed down our valley, up the hills scaring up a soar of dove After, i watched as she walked into the water and held her hands out to her sides standing As a vibrant, golden, representation of that poor tortured soul so revered in town Then fell back, with splash into a baptism of "Self" Take a golden bath and sing and let you rejoice everything and nothing else will be your ware Singing hymns to that which was Aiyeeeeee! came cry of the grieved and moaning cast of the bereaved and just another serpent's tongue of hiss of wish when we were young Singing Hymns of that which lives and say that gods do not stare.. that where we are, is not a temple that who we are, are not sacred that what we think, is ours alone "yes, all the "good" folks were at Sunday service |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
After, i watched as she walked into the water and held her hands out to her sides standing As a vibrant, golden, representation of that poor tortured soul so revered in town Then fell back, with splash into a baptism of "Self" I like, I like......very much.  Very well written duet you two! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
This is fabulous. What a spectacular duet. It's grand! Enjoyed  |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
Fabulous. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Yea..we heard the timbre's tumble rumbling our needs be known yea we saw the curtains tumble down the esplanade... The psalms of elation Echoed down our valley, up the hills scaring up a soar of dove ================================ As a vibrant, golden, representation of that poor tortured soul so revered in town Then fell back, with splash into a baptism of "Self" Take a golden bath and sing and let you rejoice everything and nothing else will be your ware Singing hymns to that which was Aiyeeeeee! came cry of the grieved and moaning cast of the bereaved and just another serpent's tongue of hiss of wish when we were young Singing Hymns of that which lives and say that gods do not stare.. that where we are, is not a temple that who we are, are not sacred that what we think, is ours alone ======================================= OH MAN!!!!! this rocks and it rolls me.... very very cool write you two.... *skips out of room singing*..... "Oh people, look among you It's there your hope must lie There's a sea bird above you Gliding in one place like Jesus in the sky We all must do the best we can And then hang on to that Gospel plow When my life is over, I'm going to stand before the Father But the sisters of the sun are going to rock me on the water now Rock me on the water Sister will you soothe my fevered brow Rock me on the water, maybe I'll remember Maybe I'll remember how Rock me on the water The wind is with me now So rock me on the water I'll get down to the sea somehow" Jackson Browne Rock Me on the Water No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Aiyeeeeee! came cry of the grieved and moaning cast of the bereaved and just another serpent's tongue of hiss of wish when we were young ~*~ This one rippled down the spine... wonderful duet, you two...let's see more! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BRAVO! And into my favorites this shall fly, to read again on a sunday morn, that I too may splash once again. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
yes |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Karen and Wranx, this is precious, sweet friend, I love it, sundays are always such wonderful days to assemble and praise just as to ourselves any day is a fine day to sing! (big hugggssssss) This is awesoe, sweet friends, I love it, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Karen and Wranx, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Just popping in to say that Ed gets all the credit on this'n. I just tossed a few words in there, but it's his concept, his inspiration--and I'm still amazed at how he put this together. gotta get a yeti!  Thanks all...and  to wranx. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Many thanks, witch. Writing this with you got me through a pretty crappy morning, and thanks to Iambe, for the inspire. Ed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!!! Excellent you two!! More please....!? ~Hugs to you both~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yeah you two have captured something here... very nice indeed.. iambe huh? how is she these days? |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ron? The funny(?) thing is, I now see parts to her that were unrealized before. Like peeling the onion of any other relationship. At present, she's a bit....petulant. See what I mean? *slaps head* Duh! Ed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Iambe petulant? layered? ( laughing) you my friend don't yet know the half of it... LMAO... wait until you start dreaming her. Oh yeah..maybe that was just me that got so obssessive.... never mind... ( grinning) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I always enjoy reading duets to see if I can tell what was written by each poet. This one flows so smoothly there is NO way to tell. It's a wonderful blend of the both of you!  |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Very Beautiful poem.. I enjoyed the read... Thanks for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
 Hey this is the closest thing to the jaw dropping to the floor thing...plus I like blue today Wow..Enjoyed most Definately Serenity and Wranxy!! ohh out of context tho *looks at her number* Hey one more number and I'll be 666 hey sorry I'm simply amused today musta been the wine coolers and chocolate lastnight...oy!!!Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Wow...this dynamic duo writes very well together....please treat us to more in the future!!! ...believe what your heart feels... |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
awesome duet. |
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