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wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-11-09 06:16 AM



Stay my hand
From this break of vow
Not to stain

Stop the ugly flow
Of bitter verse
Beclouding my mind

The spill of bile
Upon lambskin

Not to stain
A Doveskin scroll

Hurts imagined,
Phantom wounds
Beg
“Soothe me”
Beg
“Write me”

Be this quill
A bludgeoning axe
Or Stiletto,
Scalpel sharp

The result would be
indifferent

The denigration
Of something
Once beautiful


© Copyright 2002 E.F.Rose - All Rights Reserved
regards2you
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1 posted 2002-11-09 10:49 AM


After having read this three times
all I can say is  ~WOW~ ...

Thank you,
Warm regards,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2002-11-09 11:33 AM


You will quill of love's softness again, when the time is right. Now it drips of pain, a necessary bloodletting sometimes.

PS, thanx wranx, for reading my 'Soaring' poem. Sorry that your canoe trip was rough. Skeeters? or too many 'boulders' thrown at you?

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (11-09-2002 12:00 PM).]

garysgirl
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3 posted 2002-11-09 12:03 PM


Ed, I could feel the hurt coming out on these pages of blue. But, I agree with you that sometimes the bitter words we feel when we have been deeply hurt are sometimes better left unsaid. I appreciate the honesty with which you write.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-11-09 12:39 PM


Be this quill
A bludgeoning axe
Or Stiletto,
Scalpel sharp

The result would be
indifferent

The denigration
Of something
Once beautiful

If you don't know how beautiful this is? I guess I have a reason to be here.



brian sites
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5 posted 2002-11-09 03:01 PM


stain-

   spill

stain-

   quill


beautiful

Sandpiper
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land of flora and fauna
6 posted 2002-11-10 04:03 PM


Quite beautiful indeed!
scorpio
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right...there
7 posted 2002-11-10 04:52 PM


The emotion was right there...point blank...powerfully expressed...

...believe what your heart feels...

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2002-11-10 04:57 PM


wranx
Good one, enjoyed.

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9 posted 2002-11-18 12:50 PM


Sometimes, a writer's block is preferred to finding out about yrself. I'm glad you went along anyway.
Aenimal
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10 posted 2002-11-18 10:44 PM


Your poems inspire empathy and understanding. If I've understood the poem correctly then I agree with its sentiment. Though I admit to having stained my share scrolls in the heat of the moment. It's best that poems derive from the heart of emotion rather than the bile of rage.
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