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Sounds Of Silence (don't waste a word REVISED)
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Sounds Of Silence (don't waste a word REVISED) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Once brilliant tapestries were displayed upon most majestic castle walls, marble floors held delightful dances as orchestras played magical melodies while Lords and Ladies conversed hidden behind gloriously decorated masks lively laughter was once heard fades slowly into our memories. The sounds of silence reign in long lost forgotten corridors. {Revised to meet the five words ten line criteria which was so gently pointed out to me by my mummsy  , with much appreciated thanks.}If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... {On wings of words our spirits fly~ and our souls are free. ~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-09-2002 08:05 AM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, I just love this, sweet friend, I too wish castles could still exist and we can bring about a renaissance of these memories, you have done a fabulous job with the challenge, yay, your poetry is always a treasure to read, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you certainly did not waste a word *s hugs M |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Goodness, how do you do this?  Remarkable, Donna. *hugs*The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Noah, you know how much I love castles. Someday I want to visit one, or live in one.......in my mind anyhow. M, well I tried hard and had to edit one word as I realized I boo-booed! Michael.......this is how........write....screw up..........edit........write.........more edit.......lol......  It's magic!! Thanks my friend. [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-08-2002 03:45 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Donna, you met this challenge very well. As always, you wrote very well, too. I also enjoy your poetry. Thanks for sharing. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Was this my challenge? Duh Liz, look at the tile... Much enjoyed, my favorite so far! "Sticks and stones will break my bones, |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Wait, this is both of my challenges. Huh, confused, ahh    "Sticks and stones will break my bones, But words will break my heart" [This message has been edited by Wind (11-08-2002 08:08 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I suddenly have a desire to sing memories- archtype memories. lol, Wonderfully visual poem Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
omg dummie me.....I didnt catch the five words in each line........grrr...... back to the drawing board I go........kicking myself.....head hung in shame...... [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-08-2002 09:43 PM).] |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Sounds of silence reign in long forgotten corridors. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This says a lot. Enjoyed your poem. Deb |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A willing student with her pen comes back to erase, and write again! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Voilla! Check, edit, DOUBLE CHECK, edit AGAIN.......and hope it's correct now..... geez....... I want to thank Wind for making my mind think!! (oh yeah....and mummsy for making sure I do it right.) |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Great poem, I enjoyed. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Connel, thank you. |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
awesome. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Rose Thank you. "When we're torn apart, shattered and scarred, love has the grace to save us" Saints and Angels as sung by Sarah Evans [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-14-2002 01:10 PM).] |
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