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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
I ponder ceaseless On calm lake in moon’s caress As night creeps older And the air settles colder Mist grows around me Till the shore I barely see The lights winking out Leaving darkness all about But for the night lights Stars years away burning bright. The sliver of moon Slips behind the mountain soon In it’s slow move haste As if there’s no time to waste Leaving me moonless, Mist bound in the near darkness. I listen to sound Leaving the fishing pole down, Not disturbing lake No care for the fish to take Just casting a net Of thoughts to see what I get, Then the pondering Of whatever the night brings Till the next morning birds sings. Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (11-08-2002 05:40 AM).] |
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blues hearted lady New Member
since 2002-11-07
Posts 9Melbourne, AUS |
I like the kind of carefree attitude of it, the different line lengths etc. It's peaceful in a kind of pensive way. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ah, a perfect setting from which poems can float through space and find a place, ...in our minds..... Like this a great deal. Warm Regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, blues hearted lady, Pleased you liked it, The format is of a solitary Choka (Japanese Form) The theme is inspired by Chinese T’ang Dynasty poetry Which lends that Zen feel to the mood. Thank you, regards2you, Glad you enjoyed my words Gloom |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Then the pondering Of whatever the night brings Till the next morning birds sings. I especially found these words inviting... Till the next... M |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Extremly good poem.. I enjoyed the whole thing.. Thank you so much for sharing your lovely poetry! I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
my favorite type of place beautiful |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Nakdthoughts, Yes till the next, I guess I should write a sequel “When Sun Rise Greets” or something. Pleased you enjoyed Thank you, Connel, For the pleasing response. Thank you, Zinsser, May you find many of your own places For peace and thought. Gloom |
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