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Stolen Simplicity
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since 2002-11-07
Posts 22
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0 posted 2002-11-07 07:59 PM



Half asleep,
Half awake,
Want to scream,
But not quite,
Trying to smile,
Don’t know why,
Thoughts are blank,
Going to cry,
Run in circles,
But no time,
Don’t know when,
Don’t know why,
Floating forever,
Just can’t stop,
So confused,
Saying I’m not,
All the pictures,
All the time,
Who can say,
Tell me why,
So much evil,
All around,
Find a meaning,
Deep in the ground,
Step away,
Doesn’t matter,
Seem to fall,
But no bottom,
Far away,
But so near,
Never get there,
Not from here,
Now the question,
Where from here?

© Copyright 2002 Elizabeth - All Rights Reserved
Connel
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Posts 736
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1 posted 2002-11-07 08:06 PM


Well, It seems to me that you want to get far away, but from what? you never told us in the poem why you want to run away,.. Or do you want it to be like that? but overall,.. Good poem, and once again. Welcome to passions! I know you will love it here.. Just make sure you ask for help when you need it.. Its probably a good thing i did. .. Great job on the poem.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

Kielo
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since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109

2 posted 2002-11-07 08:06 PM


Wow... This was great. *hugs* Glad you're finally here. Welcome to Passions!

Arnthor

I don't care if you're an old fart, because old people are smarter than me.

-Me. (reply in the Alley)

Stolen Simplicity
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since 2002-11-07
Posts 22
Canadian
3 posted 2002-11-07 08:08 PM


Aww, thanks.

I'm glad I'm here to *finally*.


Wind
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4 posted 2002-11-07 08:26 PM


Yay! Welcme to PIP! this place is so awsome, as was your poem I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!
Robert Adamson
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since 2002-10-21
Posts 328
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5 posted 2002-11-07 09:28 PM


"So much evil,
All around,"
I liked the way the poem moves and paused on those words because they saddened me. I always wish to help and you express so much. Thank you.

etoodog

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6 posted 2002-11-07 10:55 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Elizabeth, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, you may not be able to get there from here literally but if you follow your heart and let your conscience be your guide, blessings will always be in radar-range! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we're all so happy you're here, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
7 posted 2002-11-08 11:01 AM


confused, but determined, I believe...
M

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