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0 posted 2002-11-07 07:47 PM


If I could but look at the book,
the book of fate.
Would words bless the eyes
in kindness or in harsh
reality of what’s to come?

Would the evening breeze
bring forth the rains of hope
or the dust of desolation,
the storms of agony?

Calm of the yellow moon,
lying still upon a distant
horizon as stars line the
earth in a necklace of
shimmering jewels...

Would this await the
break of new dawn?
Or would fate lie at
the doorstep of life,
coiled as a waiting
serpent?

Let the eyes of mortal man
cast a gaze upon the parchment
of one’s destiny.Let the mind
accept the cast die....rolling
against the wall of souls.

Let the heart beat the crimson
flow within veins as courage
quells the fear of that which
might come before one,
staring into the soul.

Will the winds of time blow
a page, hiding the future of
doom, or flutter the lids of
fate, squinting into the past,
saying to me, ominously...
“Beware”??

Feel the roughness of grainy sand
flowing through fingers worn.Feel
the souls sliding through the cracks
of the wall...as the die lies still...as
the last die is cast....from the book
of fate...

[This message has been edited by Magnus (11-07-2002 07:52 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-11-07 07:50 PM


Nice poem.. Good work.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

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2 posted 2002-11-07 09:07 PM


Excellent write Barry,
Much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

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3 posted 2002-11-07 09:12 PM


"Let the eyes of mortal man
cast a gaze upon the parchment
of one’s destiny.Let the mind
accept the cast die....rolling
against the wall of souls.

Let the heart beat the crimson
flow within veins as courage
quells the fear of that which
might come before one,
staring into the soul."

excellent lines here...
I like this from you

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4 posted 2002-11-07 09:24 PM


An ethereal feel to this write Mag...so be it...fate will come, of it's own accord...and we will summon the angels.
ThisDiamond

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5 posted 2002-11-07 10:50 PM




(sigh) This reminded me so much of Jumanji, sweet friend, this is a very eerie poem bursting with many valid thoughts and wisdom, indeed fate is the greatest riddle of all, then again it's much deepe rthan any riddle, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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6 posted 2002-11-08 03:56 PM


Barry, not only an interesting topic, but very well expressed with a wonderful use of imagery.

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

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7 posted 2002-11-08 04:07 PM


Barry, this was a very intersting poem....like a story.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

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8 posted 2002-11-08 04:54 PM


Let the eyes of mortal man
cast a gaze upon the parchment
of one’s destiny.Let the mind
accept the cast die....rolling
against the wall of souls.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

It's all...very good.

Deb

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9 posted 2002-11-08 05:25 PM


Barry

A deep subject, destiny, and not easy to write about...but you did the search and did it well!  

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10 posted 2002-11-08 05:59 PM


Barry, you put a lot of thought into this poem...and it shows your talent. I believe in Fate...

*s
M

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