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quietly_weeping_for_a_cure
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quietly_weeping_for_a_cure |
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neill Junior Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 13 |
quietly_weeping_for_a_cure Paused just between significance and applause We are burdened with lust but plagued with devotion And we can thank god for these dislocated joints Because just when we think standing has become stable Our knees give out and we suffocate under the weight of love We’ll exit to the right,slumped over the shoulders of addiction And pay homage to the days of pitching pennies into the canyons We’ll cross our legs and rest our faces deep into our hands Quietly weeping for a cure and the freedom to speak thoughts of our own submission All at the cost of solitude and an afternoon blanket romance We won’t drown ourselves in hateful spirits or stagnate pride Because we’re not watered down, just senseless, extreme and divine |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
interesting. you almost seem to preach in the way that which maligns you does. i'll be thinking about this one for a bit. |
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reluctantlyme Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 34 |
Because just when we think standing has become stable Our knees give out and we suffocate under the weight of love We’ll exit to the right,slumped over the shoulders of addiction And pay homage to the days of pitching pennies into the canyons I think this is a remarkable poem. Honestly. Nothing quiet about this. No matter how good looking she is... someone, somewhere is glad she's gone. |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Interesting indeed! Life is like that. The only "cure" I can imagine might be a return to the womb. s a g |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
Yes, seems like you handle the subject well. Thank you. etoodog |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Great poem, thank you for sharing... Welcome to passions!!  I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i really enjoyed this one. you put forth your message in a very strong way. i especially enjoyed quote: very well done. /jen/ what if they gave a war, and nobody came... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggssssssss) This is so very sad but true, sweet friend, you have hit the bullseye here, we are all senseless and can't find the courage to stand up and speak and then others take those brave souls for granted and restrain them because they fear corruption! (sad sigh) I hope somehow this can all change and many more can be heard, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Neill, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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