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Alicethruglass
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0 posted 2002-11-07 10:10 AM



I can feel depression wanting to set in
this movement only of fingers
touching the unneccessary
wanting to feel, even if, only if
answers are waiting on the other side...

Looking at you, ageless of memory
edged in gold, aspiring to be, yet already am
immersed in reunion, behind the facade
dancing the truth alone in a crowd.
On the other side, failing to fall
until the last of the dreamers
lose their way.


~A~


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SEA
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1 posted 2002-11-07 10:14 AM


do you know,I loved every word.....
ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2002-11-07 10:53 AM


Thought provoking and auspicious write.
Agree with SEA...loved every word.
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3 posted 2002-11-07 10:55 AM


Really beautiful poem.. Good Job!

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

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4 posted 2002-11-07 11:30 AM


I enjoyed this much, and I know how quickly the depression can set in.  Hugs.
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5 posted 2002-11-07 01:14 PM


maybe it's the mood I'm in but this one struck me somewhere deep inside, and brought out tears.
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6 posted 2002-11-07 11:21 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Alice, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I used to feel this intoxication all the time and how quickly the grief perverted my veins and my heart goes out to you in hoping soon this all passes by, God Bless You, know you are in good hands, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alice, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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7 posted 2002-11-07 11:25 PM


quite literally, i am speechless.

you did an amazing job on this one.

quote:

dancing the truth alone in a crowd.



i don't think i can even begin to comment on that one line in particular.

it's too perfect to touch.

excellent write.

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

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8 posted 2002-11-08 07:00 AM


A

There is so much to say about this write, i don't know where to begin.

"wanting to feel, even if, only if
answers are waiting on the other side..."

answers are there somewhere

"dancing the truth alone in a crowd"
oh don't i feel this way sometimes..

and for the ending... hope i never stop dreaming, and loosing my way within them.

Really love this write.
Library it goes....

Bernie



A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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opps
forgot the library button,,,
that's what i get for hitting the tab button to quickly

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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10 posted 2002-11-08 07:16 AM


take heart in the fact that the last of the dreamers will never fall.  Not until their dreams come true, anyways...
take it easy.

bhl

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11 posted 2002-11-08 07:47 AM


Amazing write and some gems, yet I like the image of touching to feel, which is an image I could hold forever.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Alicethruglass
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12 posted 2002-11-08 10:27 AM


Thank you, all who have responded to this poem. I was just trying to express how easily depression can come over you. But that the other side is there if you can just see through the mist.
~A~

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13 posted 2002-11-26 02:15 PM


It reads like sharing a tear.
And I know the crowd-unease
of which you verse.

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14 posted 2002-11-26 04:53 PM


And sometimes the mist is a bit too thick to see through isn't it?

I knew I was going to enjoy reading you when I saw your name.
Thanks for a great read

Maree.

p.s I loved every line too

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15 posted 2002-11-27 03:04 AM


I'm glad I saw this one again...good one!
Alicethruglass
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16 posted 2002-11-27 05:36 PM


*s thank you Mike, I had forgotten about this one, guess my days were looking up


Dark Angel
There are days whenI just sit behind that mist...and wait. The name I use is because there are times when I feel I am looking at myself from the other side of the mirror.

Thank you, Maree.


Dixie, thank you again for rereading me. Don't you ever sleep?
hugssssss
~A~

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