In the Darkness : Terza Rima

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Open Poetry #23

In the Darkness : Terza Rima

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2002-11-07 07:47 AM

I walk the way of sad darkness
And stay away from the daylight
So none may see I’m but sadness.

My life is kept hidden from light,
In the byways far from the seeing
I wear the cloak of the cold night.

You might say from life I’m fleeing,
That I never wish to be found,
Letting none know my sad being.

But I suffer without a sound,
Solemn accepts a life of less,
Walking within this darken ground.

Gloom

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2002-11-07 08:43 AM

I forgot how to do one of these..
as always you are in good form today.. *s

M

Radrook
Senior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 648

2 posted 2002-11-07 04:16 PM

Well, that should help us to face life optimistically I should assume!
Right professor Gloom?

LOL

Enjoyed the read!
God bless!

[This message has been edited by Radrook (11-07-2002 04:17 PM).]

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

3 posted 2002-11-07 05:45 PM

well then you certainly live up to your taken name!

seriously though, i felt that first stanza should have been one line. I mean reading it as three lines in pace made it seem like the only reason the lines breaks were there was to preserve form, which is a poor reason.

otherwise the poem itself is good. lots of dark. it reminds me of celines depressed novels.

S Arthur Grey
Senior Member

since 2001-03-19

Posts 719
woven by a poet's loom

4 posted 2002-11-07 06:12 PM

Interesting, Gloom
I like the idea of this, seems to fit my mood today, especially after terrible Tuesday.

s a g

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

5 posted 2002-11-07 06:37 PM

Nice and gloomy, but then, I expect that from you. Really nice job dear gloom, truly you!

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

6 posted 2002-11-07 06:49 PM

..Professor Gloom../\..well-written; strong poem..

../\..Spiros

-----------------calm seas-------

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

7 posted 2002-11-07 08:10 PM

Good poem... I think this is the first of your poems ive seen.. But i dunno. Good job.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

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