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neill Junior Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 13 |
Is your beauty in decay? May I rifle you a simple suggestion? Walk smaller and keep your hands in front of your mouth. |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Interesting. Welcome to Passions. Dawn |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Neill. I see you've posted in Critical Analysis as well. I believe this poem has something to do with teeth...and perhaps one's laughing too loudly... Looking forward to reading more from you. |
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neill Junior Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 13 |
thanks for the welcome! teeth? Well, maybe... how about this. no matter how beautiful you are...what comes out of your mouth can make you unattractive. had to post one in the crtical forum...it was one i needed a bit of help revising...there are some smart people here at passions... |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Yes, I understood it that way. You made me smile. Thank you. Kielo According to statistics, a man eats a prune every twenty seconds. I don't know who this fellw is, but I know where to find him. |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
very true. good write and thanks for sharing.  hope to see more of you soon. /jen/ what if they gave a war, and nobody came... [This message has been edited by quietlydying (11-08-2002 11:55 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS IN POETRY Thanks for sharing and hope to read more. "Love makes the world go around" |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
One must brace against plaque attack. One must show grace against what they may lack. One must race from the tension of smack.......let me know when I "get it". |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL at Richard's reply. Welcome to this board, and keep smiling, even when you lack a poetic attack, you can always sit here and read. I enjoyed this first post. |
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kruser Junior Member
since 2002-11-08
Posts 11 |
Walk smaller and keep your hands in front of your mouth. this is really an awesome line! Nice job! |
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