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Gunslinger
Senior Member

since 1999-10-09

Posts 901
TX, USA

0 posted 2002-11-06 07:01 PM

Watch me as I'm passing,
And you'll see me wave goodbye.
Maybe I won't make it,
But at least I have to try.

I can't see life without you,
You have always been a part,
Of every dream I've ever had,
And each beat of my heart.

But, darling, something's missing,
No matter how we try.
Somewhere in the passing time,
We somehow let love die.

Until, now, we've only embers,
Of what once was so aflame,
And passion fades to bleakness,
As we play the romance game.

So maybe you will miss me,
As I am missing you...
Perhaps the landscapes of our minds,
May be a bluer, blue.

So here's my best, you write the rest,
As we go on alone-
And on the canvas of our lives,
Dear, you can paint me...gone.

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2002-11-06 07:49 PM

A very sad write of goodbye. The alone of a relationship gone. Very nicely done.

Connel

Senior Member

since 2002-11-04

Posts 736
Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-11-06 08:11 PM

That was a very good poem... You are talented... Keep it up my friend...

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2002-11-06 08:37 PM

GS I don't believe I have seen this side of your words often, but you have penned a wonderful verse with this write. Very well done.

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

4 posted 2002-11-06 08:46 PM

Its a shame how we let love die, isn't it? You have showed an emotional side, but your strength as well. I loved the read.

Laura

"I have seen what a laugh can do. It can transform almost unbearable tears into something bearable, even hopeful."
-Bob Hope-

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2002-11-06 11:34 PM

(big hugggsssssss) This is so softly sensitive and heartaching, sweet friend, I hope all is alright as I send angel hugs of comfort your way, this is so well-spoken, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

6 posted 2002-11-06 11:46 PM

John,

It is indeed sad to see love die. I enjoyed this write though.

Dawn

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2002-11-07 12:06 PM

this is so sad, but too true for so many.

Robert Adamson
Member

since 2002-10-21

Posts 328
PA/USA

8 posted 2002-11-07 12:51 PM

Excellent. Thank you.

etoodog

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2002-11-07 01:07 AM

Beautiful, but sad. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.

Love makes the world go 'round (unkown)
with love and hugs from Ethel

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