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Walter Poe
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0 posted 2002-11-06 01:05 PM


Do you hear it

i gave up my love
she left me
it shattered loudly
it feels so lonely
here without my heart

I never noticed
how cold it can be
by the fire by yourself
until i look
and see only me

how my tears flowed
this foolish Romeo
left all alone in bed
lonely arms spread
in an empty embrace

I hope you heard
my nonlove
my nonlife
it is my gift to you
proof of my nonlove

i am at a loss
i gave her away
but she'd already gone
i cannot hear her
the pain is to strong

Take a good look at my face
Well, don't my smile look out of  place
look a little closer its easy to trace
The tracks of my tears

© Copyright 2002 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-11-06 01:09 PM


There seems to be a lot of this going around...

ouch, WP.

I know.

sigh.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
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2 posted 2002-11-06 01:09 PM


Very poignant write Paul, but extremely well done.  I love your sig by the way, it is one of my favorite songs.
secretlife
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3 posted 2002-11-06 01:12 PM


Waaw I really love this poems... So sensitive feelings...
Nice words..

Hugessss
Looking to read more
Secretlife,
(Easy come,,Easy go)


Janet Marie
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4 posted 2002-11-06 07:41 PM


heart hugs P
Connel
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5 posted 2002-11-06 07:43 PM


Sad poem. ( Sniffles )...
It was very nice... Great job.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

Gemini
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Wisconsin, USA
6 posted 2002-11-06 08:57 PM


So poignant, the sense of longing.  Very well written words my friend.  There's a big e-mail hug coming your way.
palmerj
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since 2002-11-06
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Coxsackie, NY
7 posted 2002-11-06 09:18 PM


This is a poem I can really relate too as can anyone who just had bad luck with someone they really have cared about.  I'm sure everyones been there one time at another I know I have.  It gets better it just takes time and trust me writting really helps.  Keep up the great work I'm dying to read more.

Jay

paladin
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8 posted 2002-11-06 09:21 PM


Reminds me of a line from Romeo and Juliet"."He jests at scars who never felt a wound".Poinent and sad.

paladin

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Canada eh.
9 posted 2002-11-06 09:28 PM


  

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

garysgirl
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10 posted 2002-11-06 09:36 PM


Walter, very well written, but so sad. I hope you'll feel better soon.

Love makes the world go 'round (unkown)
with love and hugs from Ethel
                  

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