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Wind
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0 posted 2002-11-05 07:58 PM


I attempted my own challenge,just to see if it was too hard. It is possible, I could even make it rhyme. The challenge was a poem with 10 lines, no repeated words and at least 5 words per line.

What night of purest memory
Sings the song with saddest melody

I wish that you could see me now
Sun shines and I'm wondering how

Last wispered breath makes haste
No wasted life, no taste,

A tounge is bitter greif
dying trees, without a leaf

Mising your love's part inside
Now like my soul has died

Whew!, that tired me, I'm going to bed    




[This message has been edited by Wind (11-05-2002 08:03 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-11-05 08:04 PM




I think you did a wonderful job.
I enjoyed this a lot.

Warm Regards,
Pat

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        "Desiderata"

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2 posted 2002-11-05 08:16 PM



You met your own challenge
well worth the effort given...

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3 posted 2002-11-05 10:00 PM




(sigh) Oh Liz, you have done a wonderful job with your own challenge, I love it, I hope all is alright now for you are so deserving of loves happiness, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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4 posted 2002-11-06 12:14 PM


cool. my reply to this challenge is up after this message.


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5 posted 2002-11-07 12:33 PM


Liz, you did a very good job at meeting your own challenge. I enjoyed.

Love makes the world go 'round (unkown)
with love and hugs from Ethel
                  

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