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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Hey curvaceous! How many times have I chimed this same song Every time that I see you walk by? My throat feels a dry my nose is a raw and my lips are a chaparapat Yet I sing the same tune to the beat of a song of a rap that goes rataratat ratatat shboomboomboom ratatat shboomboomboom ratatat shboomboom ratatat. rataratat shboomboomboom rataratat shbomboomboom rataratat shboomboom ratatat Hey curvaceous! It ain't fun standing here in this too cold year singing songs while you hate me like that. Not a look not a smile even though all the while I sing rataratat taratat rat tat tat shboomboomboom taratat shboomboomboom rat tat tat shboomboom rataratat rat tat tat shbomboomboom rat tat tat shboomboomboom rat tat tat shboomboom rataratat Hey salacious! Is it wrong for a bum to have hopes of a wink when he thinks he could woo you like that? So I say: "What the hey what the heck anyway?" and my teeth chatter papatapat. rat tat tat shboomboomboom rat tat tat shboomboomboom rat tat tat shboomboom ratatat rat tat tat shboomboomboom rat tat tat shboomboomboom rat tat tat shboomboom rataratat [This message has been edited by Radrook (11-05-2002 03:16 PM).] |
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caterina Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 188Canada |
Hey Rad, you have a unique way with your poetry-- very strong with a lot of feeling. I like this one... really got into it-- song lyrics perhaps?  caterina |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
What fun! Even if you're an ol' letcherous one, at least you're singin' to a wonnerful beat! Enjoyed the read, Radrook! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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furlong Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 129 |
like the lady  sez, uniqe // ur writting is a 1 off  , dig all them rats artrat artrat  ratart a rat , and so salaycios writting  good bless |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Hi! Thanks everyone for the response. No, I didn't have a specific tune in mind--just a beat. I very often begin writing and this metronome goes off somewhere in my head I guess! LOL! Yeah! It is fun looking at rejection in a humorous way. Take things too seriously and we become candidates for an ulcer. So as they say--when life seems to be turning into a lemon--make lemonade. Or something along those lines. Glad you enjoyed! God bless! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Yay!!! Oh my gosh, I love this, sweet friend, I think you would be great at writing melodies, have you ever thought of giving songwriting a try, I bet you'd be great at that! (smiles) This is terrific, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Radrook, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Hi Mistletoe Angel! I once played as a professinal musician back in the sixties in a rock group called the Enchanters. I also write music on my Cakewalk MIDI utility. I have never been able to submit my songs over the net though due to certain online complexities that I have as yet not been able to unravel. Thanks for your feedback friend! Glad you enjoyed the poem. God bless! |
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