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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-11-04 12:47 PM


Do damage that you always do..
help me take my stance again?

I'll sing the blues I always do...
never--will I love again.

Eat the bitters.
Bite the Blue.
say you'll never love again

Eating bitters.
Blood is blue--
in touch of air she dances through--
(you say)
you'll never love again....

Tell me I was wrong
and then
tell me I was wrong
again
bitter blues
in blood of vein.

© Copyright 2002 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
garysgirl
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1 posted 2002-11-04 01:12 PM


This is good, Karen. Have you ever wrote
Jazz? If not, I'll
bet you could!!! Thanks for sharing the "blues".

Love makes the world go 'round (unkown)
with love and hugs from Ethel
                  

the_loner_23
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2 posted 2002-11-04 09:47 PM


This is awesome. A lot of expressed emotion.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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3 posted 2002-11-06 02:30 PM


Enjoyed the read!
God bless!

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4 posted 2002-11-06 03:46 PM




(smiles) I agree with Ethel, I think you'd make a great jazz singer and I can imagine you performing like Michelle Shocked or a modern Billie Holiday with the poetry behind the music! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2002-11-06 03:57 PM



In touch of air she dances through

Magic!

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-11-06 04:35 PM


serenity,
Enjoyed the write, not the mood.

Enchantress
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7 posted 2002-11-06 04:40 PM


"Eating bitters.
Blood is blue--
in touch of air she dances through--
(you say)
you'll never love again...."

----------------------------------------
Oooh love this Karen..
Mind if I sing along with ya?!
~Hugs~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

vlraynes
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8 posted 2002-11-06 04:43 PM



serenity~
Some heavy emotions here, my friend.
Big hugs to you,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

SmartChick
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9 posted 2002-11-06 04:48 PM


This is very good. I have told myself this. "I will never love again." Believe me, this is true.
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10 posted 2002-11-06 04:55 PM


That was great. As I read it, I imagined you in a nightclub singing it in front of me. "I will never love again" Great thoughts.
serenity blaze
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11 posted 2002-11-06 05:09 PM


wow...this one was just one of those things I sang to me...you guys only THINK you think I'm strange...

I tend to put on quite a show over here at times.

Thanks for the generous applause...

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12 posted 2002-11-14 11:58 AM


For some reason, this makes me think of something I said to Lori recently. "My parents are going to have a capillary!" Then I realized I meant coronary. Then I realized I didn't care.

How mystic.

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2002-11-14 12:18 PM


Mikey...for some reason? that just cracked me up. That and the fact that I was gonna ask if you were nuts, then I thought it a ludicrous question to ask of a squirrel--then I thought of the old "show em yer nuts" joke--then...

Hugs you.

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