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VAS
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0 posted 2002-11-03 10:50 PM



Today, a bouquet of pampas grass, tinted different colors, looked much like flames of fire and one was even a smoke color, was on the baptistry wall, just behind the communion table. This bouquet inspired the following. Now the word fire in the 3rd line is meant as if to fire a bow, to shoot out. Do any of you know a better word that would be less ambiguous for this context?

flames of the harvest
shoot toward heaven with life
fire heaven's reward

©November 3, 2002

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

© Copyright 2002 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-11-03 11:07 PM


Beautiful imagery

Cold hands means a warm heart

DawnG
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2 posted 2002-11-03 11:32 PM


I enjoyed this a lot, but as I'm not good at senyru, I'll leave your question to the experts.

                   Dawn

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