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Radrook
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0 posted 2002-11-02 03:22 PM



There was a man in a far off land
who built a time machine.
He tuned it fine until the time
appropriate for him.

And when it seemed that every ream
and bolt was in its place.
He sat he down and in early dawn
caromed through time and space.

He grit his teeth and couldn't breathe.
He feared that he would die.
His eyes bulged out, he gave a shout
and baby-like he cried.

Then with a blast and very fast
He came to a lofty place
upon a cliff above a rift
dividing time and space.

He chafed at what he had got
and turned the dials again.
But nothing moved and in that groove
he firmly stuck remained.

Now he sits there upon his chair
not knowing what to do.
Sometimes he blinks.
Sometimes he thinks,
or just pretends to chew.

Sometimes he counts.
Sometimes he mounts
imaginary steeds.

Sometimes he moans.
Sometimes he groans.
And sometimes he just breathes.



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the_loner_23
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1 posted 2002-11-02 03:24 PM


I love the expression and depth of this poem

Cold hands means a warm heart

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2002-11-02 04:46 PM


Be careful what you wish for huh?
The tragedy and trap of thinking the grass is always greener...
Liked this very much. ThisDiamond

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3 posted 2002-11-02 05:31 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Radrook, this is so very tragic, sweet friend, so many times the moment is just fools gold and especially today we have to be very cautious or we may sink even deeper in despair! (sigh) This is well-said, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Radrook, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2002-11-02 06:44 PM


We are never in complete control of our destiny...James
Radrook
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5 posted 2002-11-02 10:52 PM





Thanks everyone for the feedback!
Glad you enjoyed,
God bless!

[This message has been edited by Radrook (11-02-2002 10:55 PM).]

Madame Chipmunk
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6 posted 2002-11-02 10:58 PM


Beautifully written, Radrook...
Sometimes scientific advances backfire on us in most horrible ways...
Maybe we were better off before we knew all of this good stuff!
~ hugs from the chipmunk of the future

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Radrook
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7 posted 2002-11-03 11:07 PM


Very true!
Nuclear fission has been double-edged as Chernoble and Hiroshima demonstrated.
Now human cloning is threatening to open up another proverbial can of worms. Judging by our mishandling of prior inventions and discoveries, perhaps time travel should be forever beyond our reach due to the havoc we might cause.

[This message has been edited by Radrook (11-03-2002 11:08 PM).]

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