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Earth Angel
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0 posted 2002-11-02 10:15 AM



~*~

Veiled eyes are dimming
With the passing of the years
--Memories fading.

~*~

© Copyright 2002 Linda L. Dowd - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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1 posted 2002-11-02 10:23 AM


Earth Angel - ah yes, memories fade, but they stay forever on. At least I believe they do...

BC

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2002-11-02 10:44 AM


The best of all brand in indelible mark on the heart. Smiles from ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2002-11-02 12:23 PM


You do this SOOO  well, sweet Linda.
Maybe one day I can do it, too.
Thanks for sharing your talent.


      

With Love And Best Wishes To All,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-02-2002 12:24 PM).]

Ivy Rose
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4 posted 2002-11-02 12:30 PM


Beautiful Haiku, Earht Angel.  You write in this genre extremely well. Enjoyed this immensely.  ***Ivy Rose
Earth Angel
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5 posted 2002-11-02 12:35 PM


BC ~

To be perfectly honest with you, I tend to be able to recall the distant past more accurately than the recent one! haha

~ Have a great week-end, ST !!!...I mean BC--now do you see what I am talking about! LOL

EA

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6 posted 2002-11-02 12:36 PM


ThisDiamond ~

You may be write! I mean "right"! hehe

EA

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2002-11-02 12:43 PM


Ethel ~

Why, thank you!---but why don't you give writing these poems a whirl?

I have always been considered by others (but not by me!)rather verbose, grandiose and overly flowery in my writing. My English teachers always got on my back for that.  So, if I am now able to write half-decent  Japanese short poems--anybody can!

~ hugs and smiles to you this fine fall day--at least it is here in southern Ontario!

Linda

VAS
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8 posted 2002-11-02 12:48 PM


They do, and yet some are so vivid it's as if they happened yesterday.

Great job on this senyru, vivid in its message.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2002-11-02 12:50 PM


Ivy Rose ~

Thank you! That was very sweet of you to say so!

Actually, I too had always thought that this poem would have been considered a "haiku" but since joining PiP, I have since learned that this poem is a senryu. They have the same form of 5-7-5 syllables, but haikus are strictly on nature.

~ May your world be full of the beauty of haikus and the wisdom of senryus!

Earth Angel

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10 posted 2002-11-02 12:54 PM


VAS ~

I know what you mean! Actually, I replied to BC that many of my past memories are more vivid to me than the more recent ones! Hm, I wonder what that implies?!?

EA

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11 posted 2002-11-02 02:10 PM


I'm glad that some of my memories have faded, though the happier ones have not.

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

Earth Angel
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12 posted 2002-11-02 02:16 PM


Auguste ~

That would be perfect! Forget what you would care to forget, and remember that which you would care to remember!

EA

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13 posted 2002-11-02 02:18 PM




(smiles) Oh Linda, I couldn't agree with you more, except maybe in my case because of my depressing childhood and knowing the best is yet to come, it seems usually the past memories are always the most precious and no time can ever erase them! (kiss on cheek) Always cherish those special moments, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Linda, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2002-11-02 02:25 PM


Noah, as you wrote, "The best is yet to come"--keep that thought!---but don't forget to enjoy some of the good aspects in the present.

~ May your bad memories fade and be replaced with good memories of your present and of your future!

Linda


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15 posted 2002-11-02 02:44 PM


You are a trip...and so is your poetry...
I relate to this poem very well...

Earth Angel
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16 posted 2002-11-02 04:45 PM


Magnus ~ Yeppers! Me and my friend Poette
         Tree, are regular "trips" down
         Memory Lane--when we can remember
         where it is! tehe

EA

NewEnglandlazurlu
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17 posted 2002-11-02 08:09 PM


Oh my -- I can remember 'some' things from days gone by, but honey, don't ask me what I did this morning or what I had for breakfast. Oh wait, I don't eat breakfast. Now that's a pitiful memory!

But then, some memories are better off being forgotten.

I love your haiku's, they really have a lot of thought and meaning behind them.

Hugs dear angel, Marti

jwesley
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18 posted 2002-11-02 08:14 PM


Whoa...you were writing this through MY eyes, weren't you???

Loved it

jwesley

Earth Angel
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19 posted 2002-11-02 08:34 PM


Marti ~

Perhaps you and I should start taking Ginko
Biloba to sharpen our gray matter's recall!

Oh, no! I forgot! I am already taking it!!

Did I thank you already for your sweet reply?

~ Sending you some of my botanical eyedrops to lift the veils from your eyes ~

Linda

Earth Angel
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20 posted 2002-11-02 08:37 PM


jwesley ~

You're right! I must have been writing through YOUR eyes. I'm emailing them back to you!....There! That's better! tehe

EA

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