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utopia
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0 posted 2002-11-01 08:32 PM


i'm desperate and i got tired of punching walls so here i am, writing.

don't say it's all right
and that you know how i feel

because you don't

you haven't built an armor

just so one day one idiot
can come and seem to be different

and you give him your heart
and trust him from the start

and then wat happens?
you become best friends
and you fall in love
and  the world is perfect until...

it doesn't work out
and you are left
with a hole in your heart
that just cant be filled

© Copyright 2002 utopia - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2002-11-01 08:37 PM


truth is..there are many who know how you feel..and many of us are writing just because of those feelings...welcome

M

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2 posted 2002-11-01 08:39 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Utopia, such words of pain flow from your heart, sweet friend, I think so many can relate to this and my heart goes out to you in hope this no longer relates to you, this is a powerful debut, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Utopia, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspire dby your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Utopia, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Wind
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3 posted 2002-11-01 08:56 PM


Like the name you have choosen, your poetry is paridise. I won't say I know how you feel, because you told me not to. By the way, welcome to passions. When you are feeling down, this place will cheer you up all right! we'll fix that hole for you!

[This message has been edited by Wind (11-01-2002 08:58 PM).]

Midnitesun
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Gaia
4 posted 2002-11-01 09:00 PM


Welcome. You can always write out your pain onto these blue pages. You will find many who have traveled similar paths, though none will be exactly the same.
Welcome, to the house of blue writes.

scorpio
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right...there
5 posted 2002-11-01 09:31 PM


Welcome to Passions in Poetry...for those of us who don't know how you feel...keep writing..we'll catch on...

...believe what your heart feels...

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
6 posted 2002-11-02 07:14 AM


"I'm desperate...so I'm writing..."

And a good choice it is, too!  Welcome to Passions!  Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown
7 posted 2002-11-02 07:40 AM


Welcome to Passions. I can relate to what you wrote in your poem.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
8 posted 2002-11-02 09:06 AM


Welcome to Passions...
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Love, like magic, depends on believing.~

ThisDiamond
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9 posted 2002-11-02 10:47 AM


Nobody knows how that feels until they live it...an experience to break us open, and that same hole...fills over time with pure new visions. Welcome to PIP. You are a talented and gentle poet here. Look forward to walking with you. ThisDiamond
Cerenity
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10 posted 2002-11-02 11:23 PM


Hi utopia,

Keep the work coming and we will still be here, I can say that is a sure thing. Welcome to Passions.

Love, Cerenity

CSKpoet
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Island in Paradise
11 posted 2002-11-03 06:58 AM


welcome!
pain is hurtful to each of us..I am sorry for yours.
keep writing
hugs, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

garysgirl
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12 posted 2002-11-03 09:28 AM


Utopia, welcome to Passions In Poetry. I'm
glad you found your way here. Even if we
haven't walked in your shoes and know "exactly"
what you're going through, we all will try to understand.
I very much hope that will help you.
Thanks for sharing your poem and I hope to
read more of your work.
Again...... WELCOME!!

Love makes the world go 'round (unkown)
with love and hugs from Ethel
                  

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