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Alicia
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0 posted 2002-11-01 09:43 AM


so it’s friday
and I can’t avoid the stain of a man in the road
splitting mortared forests with a motorcycle
and today’s the same
as any other day
searching loft space in another state
(although I have space here)
searching for employment far away
(although I have employment here)
for something different
(although I have different here)
- go figure
but I would miss boston
it’s streets
and I’m sure that there are stains in other states as well
fact I know their presence in every soil
the grain of another gone
the coughing dust of life stamped out
and I am growing - Growing
towards this split of me behind a door in a black chair
and me on the fingertips of risk in a drunken waste
it helps me sleep the small deaths
the little hours slit into the darkness
the gratitude? for rebirth come dawn
and it is friday
again
and I would miss boston
miss you
miss the me in the cracks of concrete
the short deaths I’ve laid in this room.

© Copyright 2002 Alicia - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2002-11-01 11:00 AM


Alicia, this will be another keeper for my favorites folder. I love the way you meander back and forth within your mind's alleyways.
the_loner_23
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2 posted 2002-11-01 11:17 AM


Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

RSWells
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3 posted 2002-11-01 11:18 AM


My only advice is be patient and calmly weigh your decision.......growth is good.....a misplaced footstep could be a twenty year sentence to a place which will e'er leave a longing for what was known..."home".....I know.
Moonlight Romeo
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The heart of you
4 posted 2002-11-01 01:12 PM


Would we miss who we are?  Or, would we miss where we are?

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

LngJhnAg
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5 posted 2002-11-01 02:54 PM


Alicia - You're wrong.  Boston would miss you more than you it.  Great writing.
Martie
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6 posted 2002-11-01 03:00 PM


Dear Alicia....I know this wanting to change...and I think it isn't the place, or time or person...it is me.  You are deep and complex and lovely to read.
Dark Angel
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7 posted 2002-11-01 03:31 PM


hey A... A girl's got to do what a girl's got to do! right?... but yes I agree Boston will miss you.

Another brilliant write from you m'friend.
Adding this to my library

Maree

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8 posted 2002-11-01 03:40 PM


next time? just ache FOR ME? poke me at appropriate times and I'll say "ow".

yer beautiful with my heart on a string....

NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise
9 posted 2002-11-01 03:57 PM


Dear girl, Boston would definitely miss you.

A brilliant write ... Hugs, Marti

brian madden
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10 posted 2002-11-01 05:03 PM


Growing
towards this split of me behind a door in a black chair
and me on the fingertips of risk in a drunken waste
it helps me sleep the small deaths
the little hours slit into the darkness
the gratitude? for rebirth come dawn
and it is friday
again
I sat here, on the third read still breathless as I peeled back another layer. I found myself connected alot to the bit I cut and pasted, anyway I am babbling.. what I really mean to say is that I enjoyed the read alot. THank you hsaring this one.   

The ladders of life that we scale merrily Move mysteriously around So that when you think you're climbing up, man In fact you're climbing down-Nick ca

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11 posted 2002-11-26 04:51 PM


and I’m sure that there are stains in other states as well
fact I know their presence in every soil
the grain of another gone
the coughing dust of life stamped out
and I am growing - Growing
towards this split of me behind a door in a black chair
and me on the fingertips of risk in a drunken waste
it helps me sleep the small deaths
the little hours slit into the darkness
the gratitude? for rebirth come dawn
and it is friday
again
metaphor and imagery all superb here..and the struggles the need to the fear of...all painted for us to see through a different set of eyes and one seemingly on the verge..of the one step or the not step...

artistry in your words... I enjoyed

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
12 posted 2002-11-26 11:41 PM


Alicia,
I'm with the witch here.

You, this, it,....
all beautiful, deep, complex

enjoyed,

Ed

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space
13 posted 2002-11-27 12:08 PM


Alicia it is you that would be missed. Boston holds a great treasure in you.

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (11-27-2002 11:37 PM).]

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