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Rick
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0 posted 2002-11-01 07:11 AM



That kiss, which makes the spirit burn
The dreams that sleep, to wake
The keepsake that does often stray
To not forget, or love forsake


© Copyright 2002 Rick Van Weenen - All Rights Reserved
LngJhnAg
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1 posted 2002-11-01 07:26 AM


Rick - Very succinct, and delivered with a perfect rhythm to the words.  I read it more than once.
Rick
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2 posted 2002-11-01 07:39 AM


LngJhnAg

Thank you for the reply, I am trying in a few words to tell a story.
Nice to hear from you.

Sincerely Rick

regards2you
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3 posted 2002-11-01 10:08 AM




This does read very smoothly, and you did say a lot in a few lines of rhyming and rhythme.

I liked this a great deal.

Warm Regards,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2002-11-01 10:15 AM


A wonderful concentrate of truth and love.
Bravo. ThisDiamond

Rick
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5 posted 2002-11-01 05:12 PM


Pat, thanks for the reply, it is much appreciated. Have a great day.

ThisDiamond, nice to hear from you, thanks for the reply, again appreciated.

Sincerely Rick

Cerenity
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6 posted 2002-11-02 11:14 PM


Hi Rick,

This was wonderful in fact a treasure, very nice to be reading your work and if I have not yet welcomed you to Passions? So very nice that you are here.

Love, Cerenity

BluesSerenade
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7 posted 2002-11-03 12:57 PM


Oh to dream like this~

Less is more, and simplicity is even better.

I'm in awe of a poet who can say so much in so few words....

as you've done very well.

Good poetry Rick~

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8 posted 2002-11-03 01:45 AM


Rick, this is beautiful. I wish I could do this...
say so much in so few words. You really get
your point across, too. Thanks for sharing.

~~With  Love  And  Hugs  To  All~~
                  Ethel

GOlDsparklESS
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9 posted 2002-11-03 12:05 PM


hmm that's deep. very eternal thought expressed here...
Sunshine
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10 posted 2002-11-03 12:19 PM



You said quite a lot
with seeming ease
a Keepsake 'tis
a welcomed please...

scorpio
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11 posted 2002-11-03 01:21 PM


Gently thoughtful write....much enjoyed

...believe what your heart feels...

Suetang
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12 posted 2002-11-03 04:18 PM


Hello Rick

Your words always leave me in awe and this is no exception. By the way, thank you so much for the comment you left on my post. I was deeply touched by your words.  I hope all is well with you.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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13 posted 2002-11-03 04:51 PM


I do believe that you have met your goal..
Short, yet encompassing many thoughts...
Nicely done..

Kethry
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14 posted 2002-11-04 06:11 AM


Rick,
your inner thoughts should become public more often. No scratch that; I hate to have to wait in a queue to view succinct and passionate poetry. So write more often and just email them to me okay!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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15 posted 2002-12-27 02:24 AM


you said much here
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