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Open Poetry #23
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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082
of Depression
0 posted 2002-10-31 09:38 AM

She & He

I await by water
The pool ripples with the wind
Calm isolation.

Teary eyes from rushing wind
As I ride to your cloister

Spring flowers dropping
With spin and ripples their own
Filling the small pool

Fragrant flower moments ours
When I arrive to your side

The sun rises high
The willow shadows the pool
I remain in calm

The shadow of twilight comes
And willow is welcome sight

You arrive with stars
Before the moon can enter
We share the garden

The garden flowers have closed
No match for your great beauty

The night is for us
As we ripple in water
Like those morning blooms

This night should be forever
We two blossoms in the pool.

Gloom

This is an example of a responsive Choka
© Copyright 2002 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2002-10-31 09:45 AM

This responsive choka spoke of every poem I have ever expressed.  Amazed.

Very well done. ThisDiamond
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
2 posted 2002-10-31 09:49 AM

very lovely

M
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