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caterina
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 188
Canada

0 posted 2002-10-30 08:30 PM

The wind begins, a mighty breath,
the kite scoffs, it's off, a torpedo
aiming for the sky/high
zipping/whipping circles
a spinning top
to a
     kamikaze d
              i
              v
              e
regaining frantic focus
to spiral
upward/upward
higherhigherhigher
shakes its tail
with a stutter/flutter
slides/glides
into a figure 8
over and over again
now straight
curve up/flip down
around and around,
now level into cruise control,
smooth maneuvers
break the pace, until

a second wind
begins the challenge again
and slips beneath his belly,
s w o o s h
rises like a geyser
tossing/dipping/flipping
funneling down,
swirling/twirling
                hits the ground
sweeps a mound of leaves,
again
an ascension, one more time
one more time
bouncing/jumping/bumping
against the blades of grass
alas, no more oomph, at last
the wild wind finally settled down.

caterina

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-10-30 08:43 PM

(smiles) Oh Caterina, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, I love the sweeping effects of this and imagined all the leaves coloring the wind! (big hugggssssss) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Caterina, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2002-10-30 09:04 PM

Caterina, this is really fun to read.
I could picture the entire event.
You did so well, painting a picture with words.

Warmly,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Radrook
Senior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 648

3 posted 2002-10-30 10:49 PM

Very well written.
I especially like the way you arrange the lines so theat the swiftness and changes of kite direction are conveyed to the reader.

Enjoyed!
Thanks for sharing!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-10-30 11:14 PM

Caterina, while I was reading this, I found myself tilting my head to the side. I guess I was seeing the kite in my mind's eye as you were so vividly describing it. I love kites. Thanks for sharing.

Love To All,
Ethel

caterina
Member

since 2002-07-25

Posts 188
Canada

5 posted 2002-10-31 03:08 PM

Noah, thankyou-- your a sweetheart!

Pat, so glad you liked. I was in a goofing around mood today and I do like kites also.

Hey Rad, I am always glad to see ya. I am pleased that you like my crazy up and down poem. I think I have an obsession with the wind... it seems to pop up in everything I write these days.

Ethel-- you made me laugh... perhaps it's a good poem to read when you want to loosen up those neck muscles? Glad you liked and thankyou.

caterina

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2002-12-27 02:26 AM

love the format and styling...great piece!

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