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cateash
New Member

since 2002-10-30

Posts 6

0 posted 2002-10-30 04:55 AM

after all that time,
that hard and beautiful time,
I was left with
This:-

your face,
your thoughts,
your essence
captured against the background
captured somewhere in me
where they slip away like
sand or quicksilver

It struck me the other day how quickly
Time fades
sensation of butterfly wings
and you were gone, just
thieved away like Helen in the night
So I paint these pictures in my head
And on paper so I don’t forget
You were,

-your smile that made me shudder
shiver like broken skies,
Like the sky that night strechted tight
violet candy stripe horizon
so neon pink I nearly
found myself walking in Toyko
Remember Bubblegum Crisis 2040?
That japanime we loved
Tried to figure out the meaning of
To find it meaningless

When we spoke warm as butterscotch
velvet pie words would pour over my
tongue and onto yours
and we’d throw our faces back,
into round moons of childrens laughter

just so innocent we were
surrounded by the yellow happiness
of Brisbane summers
lemon tree scent freeze framed
in your mums jugs of lemonade,
your laugh carried
along the edge of
the breeze

then later on that year
the way we looked at each other
as the night fell
a soft indigo coat and with it
the cold winter that had brought magic
and mayhem, teenagers kissing
and drinking by fires

now into tomorrow
I fade
Get smaller
You fall down into the
Place I’ve labelled memories
Sometimes brought back to life
As images like this that
Other people will never grip
But l will always hold

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

1 posted 2002-10-30 05:28 AM

good goddess.

(thanks, k)

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (10-30-2002 05:51 AM).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2002-10-30 05:43 AM

this is all art.

good god?

good god/dess.

great poetry.

"lemon tree scent freeze framed
in your mums jugs of lemonade,"

um....waiter? I'll have whatever THIS POET is having...

sigh..humbled me.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2002-10-30 06:26 AM

A very well written and presented first post. Welcome to Passions! Please check your e mail for a special Passions greeting. I am looking forward to reading more of your work. Enjoy your time here among these blue pages.

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2002-10-30 07:34 AM

You have some wonderfully vivid visuals in this piece Cateash! I hope to read more of your work ... Welcome to Passions!

Best wishes,
/Kit

bslicker

Member Elite

since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

5 posted 2002-10-30 07:45 AM

Welcome to Passions

great write
enjoyed

Bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

6 posted 2002-10-30 08:04 AM

You have painted some fantastic pictures in my head too... Thanks for sharing your words here... Welcome...

Regards,
Sudhir

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

7 posted 2002-10-30 08:16 AM

~Other people will never grip,
But I will always hold.~

With your very talented description we can see and experience it all.

This is wonderful.

WELCOME TO PASSIONS

Warmly,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2002-10-30 08:55 AM

Welcome to Passions!
Wonderful first post!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2002-10-30 08:59 AM

Welcome to Passions! I hope we can keep you in Open for awhile, but I have a very good inkling that you will be in Dark, in Critical Analysis, and generally all over the boards as you have some incredible talent. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

10 posted 2002-10-30 09:03 AM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS. This is a beautiful first post. Memories are something else, aren't they. Thanks for sharing your work. I look forward to reading more of it.

Love To All,
Ethel

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (10-30-2002 04:10 PM).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

11 posted 2002-10-30 09:24 AM

your face,
your thoughts,
your essence
captured against the background
captured somewhere in me
where they slip away like
sand or quicksilver

It struck me the other day how quickly
Time fades
sensation of butterfly wings
and you were gone, just
thieved away like Helen in the night
So I paint these pictures in my head
And on paper so I don’t forget
You were,

-your smile that made me shudder
shiver like broken skies,
Like the sky that night strechted tight
violet candy stripe horizon
so neon pink I nearly
found myself walking in Toyko
=====================================

very impressive and expressive writing...
wonderful poetic blending of imagery and emotion.
Welcome to Poetry Land.
so nice to have you here with us.

jm

Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining.

John O'Donohue
Conamara Blues

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

12 posted 2002-10-30 09:49 AM

Welcome to PIP....Yanno?...Women tell me this all the time when I haven't seen them in a while...."Oh yea! There's parts of you I remember......Uhhh...what's your name again?"

[This message has been edited by Toerag (10-30-2002 10:25 AM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

13 posted 2002-10-30 10:16 AM

Welcome! This poem is so full of vivid imagery, and the wordflow is superb!
Thank you for joining this board, your artistry will be greatly appreciated by all.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

14 posted 2002-10-30 01:43 PM

(smiles) Wow, this is a wonderfully descriptive debut, sweet friend, I love all the thoughts here and they always be remembered and knotted with many other special joys ahead, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

15 posted 2002-10-30 02:29 PM

cateash

The images are very vivid in the flow of this amazing poem...Welcome to Passions!

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

16 posted 2002-10-30 03:23 PM

Welcome To Pip I'm fashionably late..but I always say it's better late then never

I had to slowly read your poem..to let it all soak in I didn't want to rush afraid I'd miss something..I love your words and how you wove such a beautiful spell..capturing my breath, no seriously I'm not trying to sound like I'm trying to suck up, but I'm being so totally honest here and to think usually I'm never good at this comment thing! But you must have caught me on a good day! I so most definately look forward to more..lol what's your secret!? Teach me hehe

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (10-30-2002 03:26 PM).]

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

17 posted 2002-10-30 03:24 PM

Welcome to Passions in Poetry...your first write was beautiful...well done

...believe what your heart feels...

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

18 posted 2002-10-30 04:08 PM

Hello Cateash

Welcome to Passions! Thanks for sharing your words with us and I hope you enjoy your time here.

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

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