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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-10-29 01:50 PM




In the Blue

It is true, then ~

I fit my design
and sign
and shall not resign
these facts to fate
but revel in
the unveiling of
blueness

that hottest part
of the fire

not seen for the reds
yellows nor
even for whitest
part

that bit of blue that comes
from within the flame

that which becomes the
passionate, most intense
emotion
leaving embers
of belief
behind.

Would you?

Could you reach in
to touch the blue
as it is unveiled
to you?

Taught as a child that
fire burns

and seeing only that
which one
sees,

flesh, bone,
desire?

Would then come the fire?

Would you revel in the
unveil of the
blue?

Can you stare at the flame
and go away
without the
imprint
still on your mind

behind your eyes

feeling the warm?

In the blue, then,
that is where
I reside

look carefully…

I am there…

© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-10-29 02:02 PM


Karilea, such a beautiful poem. And I love the way it is written, too. My favorite color is blue, too. Thanks for sharing.

Love to All,
Ethel

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2 posted 2002-10-29 02:13 PM


29,320 times at that! and all of them excellent I might add.  I really enjoyed this one, almost read like a challenge you know that?

       
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3 posted 2002-10-29 03:04 PM


Oooh, I'm liking this Karilea!
Reads almost like a dare...
Excellent write!
~Hugs YOU!~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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4 posted 2002-10-29 03:20 PM


Could you reach in
to touch the blue
as it is unveiled
to you?


Taught as a child that
fire burns

and seeing only that
which one
sees,

flesh, bone,
desire?

Would then come the fire?

Would you revel in the
unveil of the
blue?

Can you stare at the flame
and go away
without the
imprint
still on your mind


behind your eyes

feeling the warm?
===================================


you knew I would be here, right?

So..this is a rhetorical moth question? rofl ...

"Taught as a child that
fire burns"



I must have missed that lesson  

Ok...seriously now...you do know how cool this poem is, right?
and...you know its a IWIHWT....
and to answer your poetic questions ....

burn baby burn  

ThisDiamond
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5 posted 2002-10-29 03:49 PM


So lovely...you are always there my friend.
ThisDiamond

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6 posted 2002-10-29 04:03 PM


I'm looking, but I see a fire extinguisher close at hand, and I'm afraid you'd use that too!  lol
Robert Adamson
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7 posted 2002-10-29 04:17 PM


You are so hot! I like to get burnt. Thank you.

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8 posted 2002-10-29 04:20 PM


a blue flame sssssssizzler!
scorpio
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9 posted 2002-10-29 04:58 PM


This does sizzle with passion...and I do see the blue...would i dare touch it?...yes!!...the risk is worth any pain to but briefly touch the hottest component of love's fire...I would not think twice...wonderful write Karilea...

...believe what your heart feels...

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10 posted 2002-10-29 05:20 PM


Wow
we all need that blue look in our eyes!!!

Bernie
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Bernie Slicker

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11 posted 2002-10-29 06:57 PM


awesome write! i loved how you wrote this,
almost as a challenge or dare to turn away.
the blue flame draws us in time and time
again, and some of us are much to weak to
resist, or perhaps we just have too great
of a heart. excellent write!
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Martie
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12 posted 2002-10-29 07:04 PM


Karilea

You are the blue, ...and the yellow in the sky on a warm day, you are also hot poetry.

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13 posted 2002-10-29 09:48 PM


Ah, so warm and lovely this is.  Beautiful write lady.
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14 posted 2002-10-29 10:38 PM


Kari darling sister of my heart, girl there is in your writing a deep and abiding echo that lingers in the soul of the reader, so few writers can and do write this fewer do this as well as this. It is a pleasure to read such well written expressive work. This is an utterly utterly utterly wonderful post. So incredibly well constructed the flow is excellent like a stream of crystal water it refreshes as it strokes the mind.

You know because you know me well that I love this utterly utterly love it, this is YOU at your best



Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

Madame Chipmunk
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15 posted 2002-10-29 10:43 PM


A very hot blue feel to this lovely poem, Karilea...
~ sizzling chipmunk hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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