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dunno282 New Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 4 |
The Truth I trust your words. You say I don’t understand. Maybe I don’t, but I’m trying to. You say you have no confidence in yourself. Then I must be doing something wrong. You say you do not deserve me. I know it can’t true. Because, You are the only one I can see myself with. Unless, These are excuses. Excuses, for the truth you cannot bear to tell me. All I can say is. I love you. I hope that my love can fill your heart. With the confidence to love me. Like the way your love has given me. You say your not use to my love. You need not get use to it. You need only to accept it. Don’t push away love because you are afraid. But instead, embrace it. You said you need time by yourself to work it out. But why not work it out together. With love, we can overcome any obstacles. To be friends Will only mean the end. These words should hold true. Unless, Your words are not true. Then these words to you are all meaningless. |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
I've definately been there! Great first post.  |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
 dunno 282, This is a poem that I am sure so many are going to be able to identify with. Well done and welcome to Passions, please check your email for a special note from us. Welcome to our community and I know you are going to enjoy it here.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Exactly...James |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions... you're going to enjoy your time on the blue pages! Karilea |
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luvlorn322 Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 43 |
probably the most preposterous thing that was ever said to me was "you deserve better" by someone i still love very much to this day but have been seperated from for more than four years, so i definately felt this piece, it's a terrible feeling not to be recieved by someone you love, best of wishes with yours. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggssssssss) I know this feeling ever so well, sweet friend, this is a wonderful but heartwrenching debut and my heart goes out to you and hope that now true love has found a way to you and you are so deserving of true happiness, I love this! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I cant wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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dunno282 New Member
since 2002-10-29
Posts 4 |
thankyou for all your nice replies. this is the first time i wrote a poem and would like to know if I wrote it correctly. does it have the properties of a poem? thanks |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
If this is your first, please continue. It is a lovely poem. Poetry comes in many, many formats, including free-verse style, no rhyming required. Let the words flow from your unique soul. "To be friends Will only mean the end." I do believe the opposite to be true, though I understand in this context you may feel it is the closing of a door. The door to these blue pages are always open, and we all welcome you, in friendship. This is a very good beginning. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is indeed one of the truest forms of poetry there is, that which comes from the heart. This is a lovely first post. Welcome to Passions and I know you will enjoy your time here. |
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