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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-10-28 08:11 PM


Why?
I have asked myself
one question countless times.
As each leaf falls,
a tear trails...
Why?

Why is it so different now?  
Feeling so lost, so without, empty..
Wishing to feel the breath of passion...
Touch the warmth of curves rising smoothly
into a garden of tender sensuality..

I reach out, fingers lightly grazing a sheet..
Once warm, now cold...
The sound of a closing door...
still echoing within my mind as my lips...
as my lips pursed to say....to beg and plead..
wanting desperately to say no...

My light dims with each passing hour...
Each day of rain overcoming each second
of life giving light...warmth that now ebbs..
Why?

Pages....

Now mere fodder for the cannon’s
wrath of black death....Each page turned
gently by the wind....blown into a sea...
Once calm....as two walked....hand in hand..
Upon sands of time, tiny grains of life...

The hourglass ebbs and dwindles...
Can not the flow remain?
Has the last grain sifted through fingers...
Fingers worn and weary, blackened
from the ink of a pen now dry...
Will words flow to the sea as a tide
of love drifts through the reeds of
one’s heart?

If not......

Why?

© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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1 posted 2002-10-28 08:35 PM


Barry - I sense pain here and sadness. Very moving write. I pray things are well with you and this is just thoughts...

BC

ThisDiamond
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2 posted 2002-10-28 08:53 PM


Sending big wind from big water...
sound of squeeling tires...back up warning beep
Raisy Eyebrows
Reversing the sands!!!
Hello Poet! Missed you much.
A beautiful and languishing write...I am always in awe of how you reach into that happy heart and create such emotive and breathtaking poetry.  

Sending smiles and a few handy sound effects!!
TD

Martie
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3 posted 2002-10-28 09:15 PM


Barry

This is so emotive...left me wondering myself, as to your questions and answers....which I guess we all must find answer to ourselves.  Life moves ...and changes...and too soon is gone...this much I know.

Hugs, dear friend!

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4 posted 2002-10-28 09:34 PM


Magnus darling man once again your words move me, they are emotive powerful and so full of feeling. The questions you ask are of course as eternal as the sun and just as mysterious, you manage to untangle the knot that leaves us all struggling for the meaning. Truly outstanding writing darling heart, as always you write exceedingly well and I love it utterly utterly utterly.

As for critique if you really want one then I’ll say the only thing I can, write more please darling heart, is that a critique? Mmmm sort of


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

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5 posted 2002-10-28 09:53 PM


Very stirring and emotive writing. Very good write a pleasure to read.
Ivy Rose
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6 posted 2002-10-28 09:57 PM


Magnus...When love dies...there is always such an emptiness, such a void. You have brilliantly captured these feelings. It's the remembrance of two that hurts the most. I hope love comes your way soon and that you have another hand to hold, another heart to share love with.  I will keep you in my prayers.  ***Ivy Rose
Robert Adamson
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7 posted 2002-10-28 09:58 PM


The title seems perfect for the content and certainly helps answer the whys. Thank you.

etoodog

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8 posted 2002-10-28 10:08 PM


Has the last grain sifted through fingers...

Why indeed.  I understand every word of this.

No matter how good looking she is... someone, somewhere is glad she's gone.
---Davey's helmet

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9 posted 2002-10-29 01:53 AM


oh my...
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10 posted 2002-10-29 02:02 AM


Barry, I'm sure that the words will always flow from your pen, no matter what you are feeling at the moment. I do hope, though, that this is just from your imagination, friend, because it is so sad. If not, I hope that you will find someone to fill that empty spot, sweet friend.
Thanks for sharing your poetry.
Love to All,
Ethel

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11 posted 2002-10-29 04:19 AM


Barry... The words flowing from your pin in this poem feels like blood flowing from the heart. I hope all is well...Paul

Magnus
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12 posted 2002-10-29 03:59 PM


To all....yes,  all is well....even after my wife hits me with the rolling pin,  Ha!
Not to worry....thanx for the remarks and
keep on writing...

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13 posted 2002-10-30 11:19 AM


Barry, I relate much to your question and thoughts here. Vey well done.
Sandra

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14 posted 2002-10-30 11:29 AM


This was "Mag"nificent writing. Truly!

I trust that this was just poetic expression and not a reflection of where you're at personally.

I'm a big fan of yours, not only as a poet but as a person.

Hugs to you, Sir Poet!

EA

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15 posted 2002-10-30 01:28 PM


I relate very well to this....thank you Sir...


Lauren~

Deep inside the stillness
........I can hear you speak
You're still an inspiration
........To me

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