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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

0 posted 2002-10-28 11:21 AM

Downcast mouth so long a wound words bled

a voice aside, soliloquy near silence,

intent that just the Moon hear what is said.

Eyes which may create a moat where tearfalls

would spare all further pain of an alliance

like the space canals afford Venetian walls

which from a distance pose serene control

while sinking all the further in mud's bed.

Ah, pride on to a fall's the briefest stroll.

Erect? Perhaps but as la Tour Eiffel

betrayed by lunar light a sparse barred cell

revealed transparent, mockery, a shell,

thus shamed or shameless (one can never tell),

its frozen frame looms stark against a sky

and holds its shadow fast as in a spell.

Some here may read a Roman holiday

or sense a sneer amid vox populi,

while some it seems find joy in ones dismay.

As Lenin in glass tomb's an apt display

and ends all rumor he from death abstains

peruse ye here the truth in an x-ray

of bare boned upright skeletal refrains

the weary words of loss, of howling pain

denying hope its flesh and love its veins.

"Happy people have no history" - French Proverb

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2002-10-28 11:55 AM

"a voice aside, soliloquy near silence,

intent that just the Moon hear what is said."

That is indeed a private space, set aside for moments demanding intense solitude.

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2002-10-28 12:20 PM

Ow! The whittling of an ego. Transition so hard; must we accept a God not believed in, and the reason?
The fatal flaw! Especially, was it in me, left in unspoken fear, but ready, and ~He~ did all the work!

I enjoyed this tremendously, though I never truly feel qualified to post a reply to ~YOUR~ poetry, I've decided I'll mention how it speaks to me.

"Erect? Perhaps but as la Tour Eiffel"
I can so relate to that!

Thanking you for causing me to think and feel.

Warmly, Pat

[This message has been edited by regards2you (10-28-2002 12:57 PM).]

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2002-10-28 01:55 PM

Richard

To let you know I have read and appreciate your poetry, your mind...and your heart.

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

4 posted 2002-10-28 03:26 PM

I guess I feel as Martie Richard, I read, I feel, and I definitely understand. This line is sadly excellent,

"Erect? Perhaps but as la Tour Eiffel"

but remember the tower is still standing

Your free style is awesome Richard.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2002-10-28 04:11 PM

RSWells
Well done, but sometimes literacy can dull the knife. LOL enjoyed.

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