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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-10-27 11:59 PM


I gave him forms
he'd sworn I'd lost--
but I had them there.

I gave him pen
I told him read--
then write the information there--

This, I could not do for him,
it was a claim's paternity...
They wanted proof of fatherhood--
they had no need of me.

He complained I was unfair
because I did not fill in blanks--
and then he asked the question--chill--
I answered him as my heart sank.

"What's his name? The middle one?"
I saw the rage in my son's eyes.
How is it that he could not know?
and then? he called me bitch--I died

a mother's death
to see the seed
planted in
a mortal sin--
I held my breath
and prayed--for me--
"keep my idle hands
from HIM..."

But wonder of the guilt of sin...

This he did, I can't undo.
How could I see the best of you?

When there was nothing there?

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Paul Wilson
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1 posted 2002-10-28 12:11 PM


Serenity~ Very touching poem. Some people never want to accept the facts...Paul

When all is said & test are done
This fool will miss his son

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2 posted 2002-10-28 02:13 AM


How indeed!  How does a father forget his son's middle name?  This is a hearthugger poem if ever there was one, and so here is a hearthug.

       
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Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-10-28 09:00 AM


sigh ..........................

hard to even respond...
all I cant think to say is remember your rule of Karma returned........

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-10-28 09:06 AM


serenity,
What is that saying, "What goes around comes around."

brian sites
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5 posted 2002-10-28 12:41 PM


hug
you can't undo
but your son can see
what he doesn't want to be
hug

nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2002-10-28 03:51 PM


I could feel that anger and...disappointment

M

Kielo
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7 posted 2002-10-31 08:28 PM


Ok, I'm going to try and reply to this... again. I feel that I need to. The first time I read it, I was shocked and angered beyond words. This has to be at least the tenth time I've tried to reply. Maybe I'm simply more affected than any of the other people who have read it because I still need my parents. If I thought anything I could do would make you and your son feel better, I would offer it, but I know I can't help. I still don't really know what to say, except that the poem was amazing.

Kielo

(wow... I did it.)

[This message has been edited by Kielo (10-31-2002 08:28 PM).]

Martie
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8 posted 2002-10-31 10:07 PM


serenity

you always touch the inner core
and tell a truth
and this one hurts

heart hugs

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