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The Ash
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The Ash |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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 The Ash (for Michelle...Oct. 28, l965- Feb. 21, 1974) Like a feather it drifted across the currents born of February just one small ash a piece of bone perhaps torn from the door in splendid flow atop a mountain wave I watched from the ground on a blue day wrenched with her presence still as I had shopped and bought her favorites my heart on automatic forgetting she was no longer Her dresses hung from one shoulder tilted in the closet and the precious pieces of her haunted the floor in taciturn where I slipped on them but could not bare to close the door no Years clicked past like telephone poles in a sleepy child’s watch then today I went with frame of mind all tucked and worn each year to fine wood but worried that her ash had burned again in a mountain that blazed to look like elephant’s back the trees like tiny hairs across the top it looked like that yes not a national forest…  but twenty-eight years ago she could have landed in a dappled current and flowed like my heart to the sea yes forever and always no matter she is like dappled light burned in many places mostly though in me  With thanks to Nan for help with photos...  [This message has been edited by Nan (10-27-2002 11:45 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Martie, this has me flooding in tears, sweet friend, I am speechless but what I can say is I know that your Michelle will always love you so much and the love mother and daughter shares will always live just as she will always guide you with her love from up above and be blessed to have you, a golden-hearted mom in her heart forever and ever! (BIG ANGEL HUGS OF COMFORT) God Bless You, sweet friend, we're all here for you and wish your Michelle a happy birthday, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-27-2002 11:55 PM).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
 ...And hugs to you as well... Your poetry is always so amazing to me. I wish I could write like you...  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Me too Martie, that is all I can say |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
but twenty-eight years ago she could have landed in a dappled current and flowed like my heart to the sea yes forever and always no matter she is like dappled light burned in many places mostly though in me ================================== and in my heart as well.............. I will never forget the way I felt the first time I saw that picture of her...the miniture image of her mother...both of you hold a place of my mothy heart. The place that I save for the butterflies. The mountain will renew in her spirit...just as she inspires your pen. Happy Birthday sweet Michelle... Love you Martie  Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie~ My heart goes out to you. Tears now fill my eyes & heart. Beautiful words from your heart.Time may ease the pain but never the memories...Paul |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oh Martie, this is incredibly touching that I have no words. Sending hugs your way dear freind. Maree. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, this is a beautiful birthday tribute to your sweet little daughter's memories. Even though she's gone from you in body, she's always right there with you in heart and spirit. Love To All, Ethel |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
This poem made me speechless and brought tears to my eyes. Beautiful. Thank you for sharing it. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
but twenty-eight years ago she could have landed in a dappled current and flowed like my heart to the sea yes forever and always no matter she is like dappled light burned in many places mostly though in me |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...  ~Hugging you tight through the tears~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Michelle is so proud of her mama.... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
When I think you've touched the deepest part of me with your poems for Michelle, I read this and floodgates of emotion drown my cheeks in tears... this is simply superb. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Photographs of a stark locale. A haunting memory through which, one would hope, is the ability to occasionally set and rest near a warming fire, a lighter place. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - your words and your pictures evoke many emotions and thoughts and feelings that are so strong and so special I can't put them into words but you do...loved it - Paul |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Martie, of all the poems you've written about Michelle, I believe this one touched me the most, because this one brought tears. God bless, sweetie. (((hugs))) to you |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
A wonder this is to read and to experience. Words fail me on the tender of this, so only a hug can express...very gentle smile |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dear friends...thank you so much for the love you show in your replies. Makes me smile... the reply below was from my son Jay who I sent this link to. Somehow when he replied, since he isn't a member..it showed up on my message. Seems like a fine place for it to me Thank you for sending that to me. With your granddaughter sleeping in the next room I could barley read it, the imagined pain almost more than I could bear. I love you. J [This message has been edited by Martie (10-28-2002 02:26 PM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh, dear Martie, I type through tears at your heart-wrenching words. An adorable angel the Lord holds close to Him. hugs to you sweet poetess. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
M. dear one, thanx for this share of your heart and I am sure...a few tears as well. Hugs You!! BIG ones.. P.S. Happy Birthday Michelle.... [This message has been edited by Magnus (10-28-2002 07:20 PM).] |
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TriXter Member
since 2002-03-20
Posts 112The One |
emjoyed The man of few words... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Well, I am not good at figuring out what Things mean, but I loved the poem. The words were organized almost expertly, with a structure that you can't see, it is just there. Yes, I know I sound like an idiot |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - I've been touched when I read this. Just beautiful... BC |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
not too often a poem leaves me with nothing to say but, "thank you." peace to you Martie. You weave words well. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This must be a night for tears, Martie... I just read the piece written by Mordecai's Mom... and now this one... The tears still flow What a beautiful little girl she was.... and how very heartwrenching to have had to lose her so young... Thanks for sharing her with us so gently ~ hugs, friendship and tearsLyra |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm not even sure how to get the words out to describe what I feel...because only tears come. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
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