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    The Ash
(for Michelle...Oct. 28, l965- Feb. 21, 1974)

Like a feather it drifted across the currents
born of February
just one small ash
a piece of bone perhaps
torn from the door in splendid flow
atop a mountain wave

I watched from the ground on a blue day
wrenched with her presence still
as I had shopped and bought her favorites
my heart on automatic
forgetting she was no longer

Her dresses hung from one shoulder
tilted in the closet  
and the precious pieces of her haunted
the floor in taciturn
where I slipped on them but could not bare
to close the door    no

Years clicked past like telephone poles
in a sleepy child’s watch

then today I went with frame of mind
all tucked and worn each year to fine wood
but worried that her ash had burned again
in a mountain that blazed to look like elephant’s back
the trees like tiny hairs across the top
it looked like that      yes
not a national forest…

         


but twenty-eight years ago she could have landed
in a dappled current and flowed like my heart
to the sea
yes    forever and always no matter
she is like dappled light

burned in many places
mostly though     in me

       
With thanks to Nan for help with photos...



[This message has been edited by Nan (10-27-2002 11:45 PM).]

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(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Martie, this has me flooding in tears, sweet friend, I am speechless but what I can say is I know that your Michelle will always love you so much and the love mother and daughter shares will always live just as she will always guide you with her love from up above and be blessed to have you, a golden-hearted mom in her heart forever and ever! (BIG ANGEL HUGS OF COMFORT) God Bless You, sweet friend, we're all here for you and wish your Michelle a happy birthday, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (10-27-2002 11:55 PM).]

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...And hugs to you as well...

Your poetry is always so amazing to me.  I wish I could write like you...
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Me too Martie, that is all I can say
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but twenty-eight years ago she could have landed
in a dappled current and flowed like my heart
to the sea
yes    forever and always no matter
she is like dappled light

burned in many places
mostly though     in me

==================================

and in my heart as well..............


I will never forget the way I felt the first time I saw that picture of her...the miniture image of her mother...both of you hold a place of my mothy heart. The place that I save for the butterflies.
The mountain will renew in her spirit...just as she inspires your pen.
Happy Birthday sweet Michelle...
Love you Martie

Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining.

John O'Donohue
Conamara Blues

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Martie~ My heart goes out to you. Tears now fill my eyes & heart. Beautiful words from your heart.Time may ease the pain but never the memories...Paul
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oh Martie, this is incredibly touching that I have no words. Sending hugs your way dear freind.

Maree.
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Martie, this is a beautiful birthday tribute to your sweet little daughter's memories. Even though she's gone from you in body, she's always right there with you in heart and spirit.


Love To All,
Ethel
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This poem made me speechless and brought tears to my eyes.

Beautiful.

Thank you for sharing it.
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but twenty-eight years ago she could have landed
                       in a dappled current and flowed like my heart
                       to the sea
                       yes    forever and always no matter
                       she is like dappled light

                       burned in many places
                       mostly though     in me
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...



~Hugging you tight through the tears~
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Michelle is so proud of her mama....
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When I think you've touched the deepest part of me with your poems for Michelle, I read this and floodgates of emotion drown my cheeks in tears... this is simply superb.
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Photographs of a stark locale. A haunting memory through which, one would hope, is the ability to occasionally set and rest near a warming fire, a lighter place.
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Martie - your words and your pictures evoke many emotions and thoughts and feelings that are so strong and so special I can't put them into words but you do...loved it - Paul
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Martie, of all the poems you've written about Michelle, I believe this one touched me the most, because this one brought tears.  God bless, sweetie.  (((hugs))) to you
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A wonder this is to read and to experience. Words fail me on the tender of this, so only a hug can express...very gentle smile
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Dear friends...thank you so much for the love you show in your replies.  Makes me smile...

the reply below was from my son Jay who I sent this link to.  Somehow when he replied, since he isn't a member..it showed up on my message.  Seems like a fine place for it to me  


Thank you for sending that to me.  With your granddaughter sleeping in the next room I could barley read it, the imagined pain almost more than I could bear.  I love you.

J  

[This message has been edited by Martie (10-28-2002 02:26 PM).]

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Oh, dear Martie, I type through tears at your heart-wrenching words. An adorable angel the Lord holds close to Him. hugs to you sweet poetess. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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M.  dear one,  thanx for this share of your
heart and I am sure...a few tears as well.

Hugs You!!  BIG ones..

P.S.  Happy Birthday Michelle....

[This message has been edited by Magnus (10-28-2002 07:20 PM).]

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emjoyed

The man of few words...

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Well, I am not good at figuring out what Things mean, but I loved the poem. The words were organized almost expertly, with a structure that you can't see, it is just there. Yes, I know I sound like an idiot
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Martie - I've been touched when I read this. Just beautiful...

BC
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not too often a poem leaves me with nothing to say but, "thank you."

peace to you Martie. You weave words well.
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