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Pezz1
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since 2002-10-27
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0 posted 2002-10-27 10:04 PM


Your luminous eyes,
will you please,
on what do they look,
oh what do they see
"When you gaze upon me?"

Do i look homely,
secure, warm and safe;
or troubled and lonely,
like some poor little waif?

Am i big, muscled,
large and strong;
or aristocratic,
haughty,
one never to be wrong?

Do i frighten, scare,
cause you some fear;
or smile and laugh,
and bring you good cheer?

Your luminous eyes,
will you please,
on what do they look,
oh what do they see,
"When you gaze upon me?"

You answer sincerely,
honest and true;
"Shall i tell you my friend,
what i do see,
when my eyes come to rest on you?"

A look, a glance,
with a gentle
smile on your face,
"I see a brother,
from the fellowship,
of the human race!!"


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Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2002-10-27 10:15 PM




(smiles) Oh Peter, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it! (big hugggssssss) We are all brothers and sisters of Him and may we all together join in harmony, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Peter, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

dgvarner
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2 posted 2002-10-27 10:24 PM


....that was neat....   i really liked that...i'm smiling.... you know..actually, that last line gave me a bit of a chill....yeah, i enjoyed that read... kind of a warm fuzzy effect there... *teehee*

hugs, g

"dont cry because its over, smile because it happened...!"  -unknown

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
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3 posted 2002-10-27 11:19 PM


This really is charming, though I've not said that about a poem before.
I very much liked the ending, quite  creative, really nicely done.

Thank you so much, a fun read.

Warmly,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

garysgirl
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4 posted 2002-10-27 11:45 PM


A good poem. Thanks for sharing.

Love To All,
Ethel

Robert Adamson
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5 posted 2002-10-28 12:38 PM


I like the story like mystery and then felt comforted. Thank you.

etoodog

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6 posted 2002-12-26 02:18 AM


very comforting write.
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