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Sven
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0 posted 2002-10-27 05:36 PM


rage on silent voice, rage on
          rage against a dark sky that knows no light
          and against walls that hold no echo
                                 save the beating of your own pulse
          rage on in sarcastic tones of harshest language
          speaking in a cadence that rushes on headlong into nothingness
                 at a hundred twelve beats per minute to start
                        and doesn't stop until it reaches the speed of darkeness
hurtling through so fast, there's barely time to stop and think about
                                                                        regret

rage on silent voice, rage on

rage on silent voice, rage on
          rage against the unseen soul with clenched fist and upturned jaw
          holding the keyed sword tightly in your other hand
                                  ready to strike and bring it down should it offend
          rage on while your blood boils and teems like the river Styx
                 at wave heights of unimaginable width and chop
                        flooding their eyes with the burnt umber of temper
casting the world in a color far too harsh and too dark to be called a simple
                                                                         red

rage on silent voice, rage on

rage on silent voice, rage on
          rage your unthought thoughts to a rational mind with deaf ears
          raise your shiv-filled voice and hand to strike with pain
                                  at the place that bleeds the most blood
          rage on while your fists fly and your hands slap the air
          striking against the fleshed anvil with resounding thuds
                 leaving the mark of your handiwork there for all to see
                        yet, being hidden by the gauze of excuse and alibi
laying aside all suspicion that everything is anything more than what it
                                                                         appears

rage on silent voice, rage on

rage on silent voice, rage on
          rage on while moments of time meant for the heart are crushed by your hands
          squeezing out the seconds of syllables
                                  as each word devours each minute
          rage on as you attempt to destroy the clock
          but finding that the springs and falls still tick afterward
                 stopping not the rusts of time and rage
                        but finding that time can fuel your voice
planting those seeds in the soil of the heart and letting them grow until the heart is no
                                                                           more

rage on silent voice, rage on

rage on silent voice, rage on
          rage on with all the other silent voices in anger's chorus
          each singing your own melody
                                  in discordant harmonies of life
          rage on against your own imagined hatreds
          singing with tongues of acrid flame and smoke
                 devouring every word of meaning in your path
                        until there is nothing left but you
nothing left but the red regret that appears to be more, which is
                                                                           nothing

rage on silent voice, rage on

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

© Copyright 2002 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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1 posted 2002-10-27 05:40 PM


"  and doesn't stop until it reaches the speed of darkeness
hurtling through so fast, there's barely time to stop and think about
                                                                        regret"


Sven,
this is amazing....

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2 posted 2002-10-27 05:45 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh Sven, this is excellent, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! Such angst and powerful thoughts fill your words and only until the next driftwood of responses fill this cape of regret does the crescendo only grow and the anger boil deeper! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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3 posted 2002-10-27 05:49 PM


Sven!  So good to see you posting here again!
Excellent, profound write!
You have amazing talent.
~hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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4 posted 2002-10-27 06:11 PM


Wow. This is one of your best EVER Sven. The power and cadence keeps the feelings in the words just flowing like lava!! Excellent sir!
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5 posted 2002-10-27 06:26 PM


Well, its good to see you posting again. This has a powerful force to it, Sven Pen. Seems like something you needed to write.

Just remember that raging exhuasts us in the end.

"two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light
a duet done with passion"

excerpt from "I Love You"

Bill Charles
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6 posted 2002-10-27 06:32 PM


Sven - powerful stunning excellent write my friend. Good to see you...

BC

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7 posted 2002-10-27 07:41 PM


Sven, this is an excellent poem...written very well, with a lot of power behind it. Thanks for sharing your work.

Ethel

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8 posted 2002-10-27 09:00 PM


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rage on while your blood boils and teems like the river Styx
                 at wave heights of unimaginable width and chop
                        flooding their eyes with the burnt umber of temper
casting the world in a color far too harsh and too dark to be called a simple
                                                                         red
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That is some intense rage, visible, and powerful. You have given me a new view of burnt umber, one of my favorite colors for portrait paintings.

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9 posted 2002-10-27 10:28 PM


A temple throbbing rant on unseen rage whose volcanic nature roils silently manifesting itself only in clenched fists and cord-like neck veins. Amid all the studies now coming out (even books) about smiles, their cause, musculature and how to know they're not feigned I've yet to see what I perceive as fact, that human faces at rest are a grimace. And now that you got this off your chest are you ready to write some more?
VAS
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10 posted 2002-10-28 12:25 PM


Rapid fire intensity!!!
SEA was captured by the same line as I, the one about "the speed of darkness."

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Tara Simms Hall
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11 posted 2002-10-28 09:34 AM


This is a change from the usual romantic posts of the past, Sven.  I like it!  Raw, exposed emotion at its best.
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12 posted 2002-10-28 10:51 AM


Oh, my!!! I don't think I stopped to take a breath while reading... this is very intense and powerful... and so very well written!!
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13 posted 2002-10-28 12:52 PM


How powerful this is. And so much a truth of the world now.
Peace
Sandra

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14 posted 2002-10-28 05:07 PM


You really have the talent to pick a subject, turn it inside out, name it and translate it into a powerful and spellbound poem. I think I forgot to breath while reading. Another fabulous poem floated from your creative mind!
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15 posted 2002-10-28 05:26 PM


Sven
What can I add to what has already been said. It is an excellent piece of writing and I enjoyed the read.



Martie
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16 posted 2002-10-28 05:58 PM


Sven

Yes, intense and powerful...break of pen!  Excellent writing!

Janette
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17 posted 2002-11-18 06:05 PM


WOW ... what a purging of the soul.

Your best write to date dear friend, glad I did not miss it.  Now allow your heart to be filled only with love.

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18 posted 2002-11-18 06:11 PM


You have been missed....and by the way this
reads,  you surely have made up for it with
a vengeance.....  Welcome back, sir...

Madame Chipmunk
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19 posted 2002-11-19 01:12 AM


An intense and powerful write, Sven...
I enjoyed it a lot
~ hugs from a chipmunk seeing red

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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20 posted 2002-11-19 06:53 PM


enjoyed
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