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Jamie
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0 posted 2002-10-25 01:10 AM



I rose as if from a bed of mud,
covered with a memory
of rain - your hand warm
and dry beneath mine. There
were no yellow tulips so early
in March so you held a bright
new jonquil before you in the other.

Closed eyes held the past
for only a moment before
it was lost to the present.
It’s 7:00 AM and last night’s wind
has brought Autumn's first rain,
sweet and noisy.

On the bedside radio a
girl with a rainy day voice
sings about love and tenderness-
of being kind and generous.
She probably meant it
at the time.

Rainy day voices have accents
all their own, with a comeliness
that surrounds us in comfort,
collecting our secrets and
keeping us warm, somehow
always keeping time with the rain.

The seasons have come to be
my time keepers, each with its
own way piling days into months.
Today's rain is falling on dying mums,
and my cold empty hands.
We died long ago.

© Copyright 2002 Jamie Patterson - All Rights Reserved
Aimster
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1 posted 2002-10-25 02:19 AM


Jamie,

Hello my friend, long time! I really
enjoyed this poem from you, much depth
and emotion...and always your heart shines straight through! beautiful writing!
i've missed you. drop me an email when you
get the time. take care.
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

Kethry
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2 posted 2002-10-25 05:24 AM


Now I wish I had a rainy day voice, instead of the frog in my throat I get from rainy days. As always I like your work
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Martie
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3 posted 2002-10-25 09:45 AM


Jamie

To tell time by the seasons here, might mean it is summer all the time.  It's been a long time since it rained, but perhaps today.  Enjoyed your poem!

Tammy Blessing
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4 posted 2002-10-25 09:49 AM


Enjoyed this poignant write.
Tammy

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2002-10-25 09:52 AM


You've been missed here sir. The underlying sadness in this poem throbs like a heart beating in pain. I understand.
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6 posted 2002-10-25 02:29 PM


Jamie, I really like this. It's so beautiful, with it's memories...but so sad, with it's feelings of loss. You did an excellent job of showing both. Thanks for sharing.
Love To All,
Ethel

Dark Angel
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7 posted 2002-10-25 05:47 PM


Jamie, You know that I love this. It's so sadly beautiful and wonderfully penned by you m'dear.

On the bedside radio a
girl with a rainy day voice
sings about love and tenderness-
of being kind and generous.
She probably meant it
at the time.


She probably did m'friend

Hugs

Mmy


Jamie
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8 posted 2002-10-26 03:16 PM


Thanks for the thoughts, as well as for taking the time to read and reply.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Christopher
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9 posted 2002-10-26 07:11 PM


Hey J - has been a while... you should stop that, you're too good a poet to keep these from 'us.'

"She probably meant it
at the time."

Is perfect. It's the fullstop in between some smooth runs on the country highway. It jarred at the right moment, preparing properly for the next accelleration. Well done.

C

Bill Charles
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10 posted 2002-10-26 07:47 PM


Jamie - I enjoyed reading this writing about rainy day voices. I really liked the words. Nice write...

BC

Robert Adamson
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11 posted 2002-10-26 09:16 PM


Good poetic sense. I like it. Thank you.

Mistletoe Angel
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12 posted 2002-10-26 10:59 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Jamie, my heart goes out to you, I can feel your sadness in these words but know your loved ones you lost will never forget you and through the rain their velvet glove will tiouch your heart and caress you with a rainbow! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jamie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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13 posted 2002-10-27 12:23 PM


Very vivid images Jamie.  This was very well written and I enjoyed it much.
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with you
14 posted 2002-10-27 05:00 PM


"Rainy day voices have accents
all their own, with a comeliness
that surrounds us in comfort,
collecting our secrets and
keeping us warm, somehow
always keeping time with the rain."

I know just what you mean....
keeping this

Dark Angel
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15 posted 2002-10-28 01:03 AM


I just realised that I hadn't added this to my library, so.....


adding

Severn
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16 posted 2002-11-16 06:46 AM


...

All I can say my dear is that your poetry has grown you know? Can you see that? Your tones...your thoughts..the way you put your words together...

I'm sorry it took me so long to get here...useless ain't I? Sigh...well, you know how it is...

This is a hush, this poem, quiet, solemn...and yeah, it's libraried now along with the rest of the 8,000 heh..

K

Jamie
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17 posted 2002-11-16 11:22 PM


Gee,, still growing ( and not just bigger around)-- at my age--lol

influence of a southerly wind extended the growing season i guess

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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